It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With important of study about past time, often debate has developed whether native history essential for study or International history is more effective in study curriculum. One side of debate are those people who claim that local history has great impact and significance on pupils because student flourished in their country and they understand easily. Other side of the view international student grasp knowledge about world-wide history and great personality has lived in the world. Here, I firmly believe that former view has more weight and this essay will discuss each point that will be proved that why local history more effective.
There are manifolds points that shore up my opinion. First and foremost, student easily get information about native history and they easily grasp information because proofs of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy have great command on local historical subjects cause of much information available about vernacular history. Whereas, World histories difficult understand because not more resource available on worldwide also some history written in foreign language and it is perplexing for students. Although many books and magazine available, but sometime it is expensive and not releases internationally. For instance, 'After the World War 2' history book only available in few languages consequently, it is not eminent in the world. Hence, study about local history more important.
Further emphasizing on my point of view, students have a properly knowledge about vernacular history then, they understand international history effectively. In other words they recognize the contribution of their country in world history. Moreover plethora of international historical events had made by the many domestic phenomena. To exemplify, consider the example of India where students know about the British emperor, therefore, they know what is the situation about India in world war two. Also, they easily understand what is the contribution of India and England in that War.
To conclude, every coin has two side, important of world history is not exception. It is essential for pupils because not every events and great personality born in local country but, those things would be beneficial for children. While other hand local history have great light on native students also they can easily visual past situation. Thus, finally native subjects about past time had better for students in school.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Unique words percentage: 0.505291005291 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
because the introduction and conclusion are too long. Make them simpler and shorter.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 2030 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.37 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.188 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
With important of study about past time, often debate has developed whether nat...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...use proofs of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy have great command on lo...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
... of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy have great command on local hi...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pedagogy seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much pedagogy', 'a good deal of pedagogy'.
Suggestion: much pedagogy; a good deal of pedagogy
... of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy have great command on local historical ...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...e available. In addition. many pedagogy have great command on local historical subje...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
... about local history more important. Further emphasizing on my point of view, studen...
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Message: You used an adverb ('properly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('knowledge') instead of another adjective.
...zing on my point of view, students have a properly knowledge about vernacular history then, they und...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...tion of their country in world history. Moreover plethora of international historical ev...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hings would be beneficial for children. While other hand local history have great lig...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...on. Thus, finally native subjects about past time had better for students in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 378.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50529100529 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75845762907 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505291005291 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3290814333 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.05 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281622114404 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895470577422 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596483098456 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186284293737 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385407772477 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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