The following appeared in a recommendation from the President of the Amburg Chamber of Commerce.
"Last October, the city of Belleville installed high-intensity lighting in its central business district, and vandalism there declined almost immediately. The city of Amburg, on the other hand, recently instituted police patrols on bicycles in its business district. However, the rate of vandalism here remains constant. Since high-intensity lighting is clearly the most effective way to combat crime, we recommend using the money that is currently being spent on bicycle patrols to install such lighting throughout Amburg. If we install this high-intensity lighting, we will significantly reduce crime rates in Amburg."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument claims that the Belleville installed high-intensity lighting in its central business district and vandalism is declined. In other hand police patrols bicycles at Amburg are ineffective so same high-intensity light also apply in Amburg business area. Stated in this way the argument fails to mention bases on which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on an assumption, for which there are nor better evidence so, the argument can be unsubstantiated and unsupported. However careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals little credible support for the author argument.
First of all, The argument readily assumes that the in Belleville installed high-intensity light and vandalism is declined. Stated in this way argument fails to mention bases on which it could be evaluated. For example, In Belleville there are 10 crimes are noted. and after that there are 5 cases are reduces than we can not say that vandalism crimes are decreases due to lights. It may be possible if people do not like to mar public property, then also vandalism crimes are reduces.
Second,the argument claims that the police patrols bicycles at Amburg are ineffective and crime rate is constant. It is again weak and unsupported clamis as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between crime rate and police patrolling. For example, there are many vandalism crimes recorded in Amburg then it may be possible police unable to reduces crime rate. For example If crimes are reduces but it may be possible if people vandalize the property when police are not present at a particular place. So, it is not valid to say that crimes rate are not decreases.
Finally, The author cites that the same high intensity light apply in Amburg same as Billeville, So crimes in Amburg are reduces. it is also weak argument. Here we can not said that ther are same position and rate of crimes in both city. For example there are few cases in Belleville so crimes case reduces due to intensity light. But it is does not possible to crime rates also decreases in Amburg. However careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals little credible support for the author's argument with respect to some critical factors and raises several skeptical questions. Without answer of this question the reader left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more of wishful rather than substantive.
In conclusion, The author's conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide better concrete evidence. It could be considerably strengthened if the author mentions all relevant facts. In order to asses the merit of several critical situations it is essential to have a depth knowledge about contributing factors. As a result, The conclusion has a no legs to stands.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is again weak and unsupported clamis as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between crime rate and police patrolling.
Error: clamis Suggestion: claims
Sentence: Here we can not said that ther are same position and rate of crimes in both city.
Error: ther Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 459 350
No. of Characters: 2281 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.629 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.36 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.454 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...lleville there are 10 crimes are noted. and after that there are 5 cases are reduce...
^^^
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...o vandalism crimes are reduces. Second,the argument claims that the police patrols...
^^^^
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ville, So crimes in Amburg are reduces. it is also weak argument. Here we can not ...
^^
Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
... is also weak argument. Here we can not said that ther are same position and rate of...
^^^^
Line 4, column 483, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...reveals little credible support for the authors argument with respect to some critical ...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 548, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pect to some critical factors and raises several skeptical questions. Without ans...
^^
Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... than substantive. In conclusion, The authors conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 458.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08951965066 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77825451606 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427947598253 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6552687815 57.8364921388 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.3333333333 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.962962963 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92592592593 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138204001363 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459979590639 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877916099171 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878766502275 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681637969301 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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