The Omega University has decided to terminate the student evaluation of professors, in order to enable it’s graduates to secure better jobs. There are several flaws in this given argument. So, the author should needs to conduct myriad of surveys by considering correct statistical data about their University.
First, fifteen years ago, the professors at Omega University have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Hence, the Omega University has implemented a new procedure that allows the student to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all of their professors. Here, the author should make a strong analysis that there may be a chance of students really perform their exams very well, So the professors have assign higher grades to them. Hence, the author should possess strong statistical data, whether the students perform their exams well or not. Then only, the author could make a correct decision about the professor’s grading.
Second, the graduates of Omega University have not been successful at getting jobs while comparing with Alpha University. This is an another flaw, Both the Universities may get vary in their circumstance, syllabus, teaching process etc. So, the students evaluation of professor’s teaching effectiveness at the Omega University is not only the reason for their student’s unsuccessfulness in getting jobs. And, the author does not consider any teaching information that has been followed by Alpha University, without that information it is not possible to make a better decision by comparing their nearby Alpha University.
Finally, I conclude that during this fifteen years, there are many factors that has been affected the student’s job like Company may not have any job vacancies, the University may change their syllabus, the professors may get transfer due to several reason. These are all the factors that may affected the student’s better job. So, the author should make several analysis in many different ways to make a better decision.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1697 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.206 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'assigned'.
Suggestion: assigned
...exams very well, So the professors have assign higher grades to them. Hence, the autho...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a flaw' or 'another flaw'.
Suggestion: a flaw; another flaw
...omparing with Alpha University. This is an another flaw, Both the Universities may get vary in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...syllabus, teaching process etc. So, the students evaluation of professor's teaching...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 248, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
... the professors may get transfer due to several reason. These are all the factors that may aff...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 366, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun analysis seems to be countable; consider using: 'several analyses'.
Suggestion: several analyses
... better job. So, the author should make several analysis in many different ways to make a better...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 386, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... author should make several analysis in many different ways to make a better decision.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, if, may, really, second, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45398773006 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95722067607 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484662576687 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0668280869 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.533333333 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404290208843 0.218282227539 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144797355032 0.0743258471296 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15331751218 0.0701772020484 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241262767389 0.128457276422 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16118397998 0.0628817314937 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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