The author states that the memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College has an idea to build new attractive dormitories to make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham. Here, the author makes lot of assumptions based on fallacious such as they need to satisfy the housing needs of the students, but there is no evidence that what kind of service that the students need, there is no sufficient parameters that the Buckingham's enrollment will double over the next 50 years, blindly assume that the average rent for an apartment in their town has risen in recent years.
First, the author should analyze what kind of services that the student needs like study hall, WIFI facility, food quality etc. Then only the college should make a decision about whether to build a new dormitories or not. If the college fail to provide these facilities then they may get bad impression from the current students, while concentrating on new dormitories construction.
Second, the author states that the Buckingham's enrollment will double over the next 50 years, this is an another fallacious that there is no strong parameters that will lead to an enrollment increase. For example, over the 50 years the college may vary in the aspect of teaching, placements that may lead to decrease the number of admission. Also,there is an another fallacious that the author states that the the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years, so they are going to build an attractive dormitories. Suppose, if the rent of the dormitories higher than the average rent of an apartments in the town, then the students obviously prefer the apartments. So, the author should posit a strong evidence that should support the above mentioned possibility.
Finally, I conclude that the author must possess the evidence that should support the above mentioned possibility and also have exact statistic data about varies possibility. Then only the Buckingham College could make a clear decision about whether to build a new attractive dormitories, Otherwise the college may face lot of problems.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1733 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.966 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.651 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.274 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.445 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 571, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e average rent for an apartment in their town has risen in recent years. First...
^^
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'dormitory'?
Suggestion: dormitory
...a decision about whether to build a new dormitories or not. If the college fail to provide ...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dormitories'' or 'dormitory's'?
Suggestion: dormitories'; dormitory's
...nt students, while concentrating on new dormitories construction. Second, the author st...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., while concentrating on new dormitories construction. Second, the author stat...
^^
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a fallacious' or 'another fallacious'.
Suggestion: a fallacious; another fallacious
... double over the next 50 years, this is an another fallacious that there is no strong parameters that...
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Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...o decrease the number of admission. Also,there is an another fallacious that the autho...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a fallacious' or 'another fallacious'.
Suggestion: a fallacious; another fallacious
... the number of admission. Also,there is an another fallacious that the author states that the the ave...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... fallacious that the author states that the the average rent for an apartment in our to...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... fallacious that the author states that the the average rent for an apartment in our to...
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Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'dormitory'?
Suggestion: dormitory
...o they are going to build an attractive dormitories. Suppose, if the rent of the dormitorie...
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Line 5, column 610, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an apartment' or simply 'apartments'?
Suggestion: an apartment; apartments
...itories higher than the average rent of an apartments in the town, then the students obviousl...
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Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'dormitory'?
Suggestion: dormitory
...about whether to build a new attractive dormitories, Otherwise the college may face lot of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, then, while, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10057471264 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73427203461 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459770114943 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.7225839642 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.916666667 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328341076178 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12141027833 0.0743258471296 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809879779665 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204435784919 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706487830131 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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