Omega University came up with a method to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of the professors and since the enforcement of this new procedure, the teachers are assigning higher grades and the student grade averages have risen by 30 percent. The employers don't trust these grades due to which the graduates from Omega University aren't successful in their venture to secure jobs as opposed to the graduates from Alpha University who have a higher chance of getting jobs. At the first glance, the argument seems to have no blemishes and is convincing to the readers but a careful scrutiny reveals a few flaws in the argument.
Admittedly, the evaluation criteria implicitly motivates teachers to give a higher grade to a student. However, the argument should have mentioned whether these evaluations are anonymous or not and if they turn out to be the former case, probably the teacher is being biased towards only those students. This could explain the dramatic rise in the grades of a few students which reflects in the drastic average increase by 30 percent.
Secondly, the students who have been scoring high grades consistently might be losing out on getting a job due to the teacher's partisan behaviour. Probably, when the employers see the dramatic rise in grades, they might not be able to differentiate between the bogus scores of some students and the genuine scores of the other students. Additionally, the argument doesn't mention the reasons why potential employers are selecting more students from Alpha University. If the Alpha University was following the same evaluation procedure for it's teachers, then this evidence would weaken the argument.
Thirdly, the reason for the teachers assigning higher grades in class hasn't been mentioned. Maybe the teachers might have raised their standards of teaching in the fear of the evaluation process. Probably, before the evaluation process, the teachers weren't bothered as to how the students score in their subjects but now, the fear of being evaluated motivates them to perform better. This could mean that since the enforcement of this procedure, students have no difficulties in grasping the concepts taught by the teacher and hence, they are scoring better grades. This could be one of the possible explanations for the drastic change in the grades. If this is the case, then the potential employers are missing out on a lot of smart candidates.
Therefore, the argument lacks a few evidences which would help us assess the argument in a better way. As of now, the argument is inherently flawed and shedding light on the flaws and fixing them would consolidate the argument.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2167 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.97 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.681 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.962 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...have risen by 30 percent. The employers dont trust these grades due to which the gra...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ich the graduates from Omega University arent successful in their venture to secure j...
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Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...er students. Additionally, the argument doesnt mention the reasons why potential emplo...
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...achers assigning higher grades in class hasnt been mentioned. Maybe the teachers migh...
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Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...re the evaluation process, the teachers werent bothered as to how the students score i...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14617169374 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74088860131 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477958236659 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1213628783 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.222222222 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9444444444 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221680872479 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07332181676 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818698577576 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125085158022 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995116720597 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.