Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Firstly, It has been assumed that the professors are assigning higher grades in their classes only for getting a better evaluation from their students. But, no evidence is provided to bolster this assumption. The scenario may not be the way the author is thinking. The students of Omega University may become aware of the benefits of good grades and start working hard to achieve it. The professors may use more advanced and effective teaching method for getting a better evaluation and as a result, students may do good in their exams. Another reason can be up-gradation of research facilities and laboratory by the university administration. Without taking into account all these possibilities, we are unable to draw
any definite conclusion about the authenticity of the argument.
Secondly, The author has mentioned that inflated grading is the only reason for the students of OMEGA University for getting lesser success compared to the ALPHA University. The author has not provided any relevant information regarding the research, internship, laboratory, learning facilities of both of the universities. Maybe in ALPHA university, these facilities are better than OMEGA university. Maybe the faculty members of the ALPHA university are more qualified that the faculty members of the OMEGA university. Maybe the learning environment is better in ALPHA university. Without mentioning these key factors, the author can not make a valid comparison between the two mentioned university and can not conclude that inflated grading is the only reason of the lesser success of the students of OMEGA university.
Finally, the criteria of success for both universities are not explicitly defined in the given argument by the author. It can be the case that ALPHA university graduates are getting jobs quickly after graduation. But, the graduates from OMEGA university are getting much better jobs, although slightly late. If the criterion of success is getting a job as early as possible after graduation, then the students of ALPHA university are more successful than the students of OMEGA university. Conversely, if the criterion of success is getting a good job after graduation, then the students of OMEGA university are more successful. So, without mentioning the criteria of success, one can not compare the success rate of the students of the two mentioned universities.
In conclusion, due to the reliance on some unwarranted and unsubstantiated assumptions, the argument is weak. To bolster the argument, the author should provide the necessary evidence. Such evidence may include the following comparison: a study showing the awareness of the students about grades before and after the implementation of evaluation technique, a comparison of professor's teaching method before and after the implementation of evaluation technique, another study describing the comparison of two universities based on laboratory, research, internship, learning environment, counseling opportunities.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- relatively duplicated to argument 1
argument 3 -- not OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2476 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.43 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.012 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 168 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 126 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 82 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.567 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 87, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s and start working hard to achieve it. The professors may use more advanced and e...
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Line 12, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed that the faculty members of the OMEGA university. Maybe the learning environme...
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Line 13, column 13, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ulty members of the OMEGA university. Maybe the learning environment is better in A...
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Line 24, column 114, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Such evidence may include the following comparison: a study showing the awarenes...
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Line 25, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s before and after the implementation of evaluation technique, a comparison of pr...
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Line 28, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...environment, counseling opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2583.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66447368421 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13419392393 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405701754386 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.0324286265 57.8364921388 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.409090909 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7272727273 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 5.15768463074 465% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212972571254 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626570301006 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060445457336 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0673438302941 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531871288867 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.3550499002 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.197005988 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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