Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The given issue prompt is claiming that Government should invest the same amount of money or effort in the arts and the military. Art is necessary for a country or nation to upright its cultural values so that the next generation can adopt the culture and values of their older generation. Moreover, arts of a nation play a big deal in shaping the mindset of the people of a particular nation. On the other hand, the military is one of the crying needs of a nation because the military protects a nation when the nation is attacked by another nation. The stronger the military, the stronger the nation. As the two things are equally necessary for a nation, I think, the government should spend more on the military than the arts depending on the situation. But, there are some cases when spending on arts may have a good impact on the development of a nation.
To begin with, let's take the example of Bangladesh that has got independence after 9 months of war with Pakistan. After getting independence, it is not feasible to spend money on arts. The government needs to invest money on the Military to make the newly independent nation stronger so that no other nation can take the advantage of the vulnerability of the nation. Because the country is not in a condition to give an equal amount of consideration for the military and the arts. Spending on the military is a basic need in this situation.
Moreover, considering the recent world politics where every nation is trying to expand its territorial area, nations all over the country must make their military as stronger as possible. America and Russia are leading the world politics in the modern world because they both have a strong military. Without a strong military, it is impossible to get a good position in the world politics. So, a nation must spend more on its military.
As having a stronger military is a basic need for a nation nowadays, only after having a strong military, the government of a nation can take into account the arts of a nation. As arts define the way of thinking of the people of a nation and it defines the cultural aspects of a nation, spending on arts is also necessary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, moreover, so, i think, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 384.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65625 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63885233893 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421875 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6526695124 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100079876326 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433784053851 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346129917407 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715355386711 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159489481379 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.