Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the argument makes the hasty conclusion based on several unwarranted assumptions. If these assumption are proven invalid, then the authors argument can be seriously undermined. The author has failed to provide the data to back up these assumptions and make a sound judgement.
Firstly, the author states that since the implementation new procedure, where students measure their teacher's effectiveness, grades of the student have gone up. The author implies that reason for higher grades is falsification of grades. However, there is no data presented to support this. It may be the case that after the implementation professors have taken extra efforts in teaching, like incorporating new methods of teaching with old ones, which has resulted in greater understanding of the subject matter by students. Consequenly, they performed well in their tests. The author also mentions that the average student grades have increased by 30%. But the question is , how statistically significant is the number? It is quite possible that 30% does not correlate eith significant rise in actual grade.
Secondly, the author propounds that many employers have noticed the unusal rise in grades in the students of Omega university. Furthermore he claims that because of this fact, the student are failing in securing jobs as comapred to their counterparts from Alpha University. The author, here, has made a hasty conclusion. There may be other reason why the students can not get jobs. Perhaps the courses offered in both universities are different. It may the case that Alpha Univaersity offers vocational courses whereas Omega University offers that more reaseach oriented. As a result, many student do not seek job. We just do not know. Furthermore, no data is provided to support the claim that students from Omega University are not getting jobs as compared to the students in Alpha University. A comprehensive study condcuted among the students from both universities might help shed more light on this issue. The results can this study will help evaluate the argument.
In conclusion, the author's argument is not well thought through. The author has provided enough evidence needed to evaluate the argument. In addtion, whatever data is provided lacks depth of detail. The author should provide, at least abovementioned, evidence to seriously consider the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 374 350
No. of Characters: 1948 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.398 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.209 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.829 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.906 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.577 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.424 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
... on several unwarranted assumptions. If these assumption are proven invalid, then the authors ar...
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Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...assumption are proven invalid, then the authors argument can be seriously undermined. T...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 675, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ve increased by 30%. But the question is , how statistically significant is the nu...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...es in the students of Omega university. Furthermore he claims that because of this fact, th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 586, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...at more reaseach oriented. As a result, many student do not seek job. We just do not know. F...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ate the argument. In conclusion, the authors argument is not well thought through. T...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, at least, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37165775401 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92796599859 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550802139037 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8089032973 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.2692307692 119.503703932 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3846153846 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26923076923 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191257658909 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465738639088 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537158218495 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950487900569 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909342900221 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.27 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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