Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The author of the argument claims that Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors. To support his view, the author says that since Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. The professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent, which resulted in graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as other university students are getting because the employers believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement.
To determine the validity of the argument, we must understand that whether by terminating the procedure of evaluating the teaching effectiveness of all their professors will able to solve the problem of getting jobs or not.
First, the author claims that professors are begun to assign higher grades in their class so as get a better evaluation from the students. However, there might be a possibility that the grades of the students increased due to the efforts of the teacher to make the student more comfortable with the subject or maybe because of their efficiency of teaching. So, claiming that teachers are assigning high grades to students in order to get a better evaluation from them is based on flawed evidence. The author has to provide some effective evidence in support of his claim.
Secondly, the author says that students are not successfully getting jobs as compared to other universities. But, it might be possible that Omega students are not study-oriented compared to Alpha students and getting lower grades in further comparison. Any such evidence would tend to strengthen the argument despite being based on a false premise because employers are preferring graduates from Alpha University based on their grades. Moreover, it might be possible that employers were seeking students from the courses offered by Alpha University and by Omega University.
In sum, the author's argument was based on the uncleared and unsubstantiated assumptions. In order to evaluate the merit of the argument, we required more information and data about the point mentioned in the argument. To make the argument stronger the author should outline the real reason behind why Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: - 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1990 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.265 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.829 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.196 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.624 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 575, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tting because the employers believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not ...
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Line 9, column 361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...use of their efficiency of teaching. So, claiming that teachers are assigning hig...
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Line 13, column 368, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ed on a false premise because employers are preferring graduates from Alpha University based o...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a University and by Omega University. In sum, the authors argument was based o...
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Line 17, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... by Omega University. In sum, the authors argument was based on the uncleared and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39682539683 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89224469315 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455026455026 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0801145209 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40216547048 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139920222527 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123835398464 0.0701772020484 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225260351916 0.128457276422 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157430395955 0.0628817314937 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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