Five years ago, the local university built two new dormitories through different contractors: Aleph
Construction and Gimmel Builders. The buildings were nearly identical, though it cost Gimmel Builders
approximately 20 percent more to construct their dormitory. Aleph’s dormitory, however, has required
approximately 10 percent more in maintenance costs per year over the past five years. Therefore, to
construct their new dormitory with the lowest overall cost, the local university should hire Aleph
Construction.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions in the expert’s claim. Be
sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the
argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
The author claims to suggest having a contract with Aleph Construction based on the assumptions which may or may not be valid,
under certain circumstances. The supposition includes percentages in values which is vague and cannot lead to practical inference
of overall cost. One cannot determine the actual cost without having acurate figures, which by statement, is also, five years old study.
In order to estimate it more acurately, the reasearch needs to determine the definition of "nearly identical" as well.
One of the leaps in this claim is the involvement of percentages rather than having actual figures. What is the actual amount
of 20 percent more? What is 10 percent more? While it is mentioned in percentages, we are not sure about either 20 percent of
construction is more than 10 percent of maintainance cost per year over the five year term? The author assumed that 20 percent construction cost
is higher than 10 percent of maintainance cost for five years. If so, then there may be or may not be a case that after 15 years,
maintainance cost cross the figures of construction costs, keeping the depreciation of money over the time.
Additionally, a supposition is inherited that these two companies have same strategy of work five years back and now. While this supposition
can be true, it can be false due to advancement in technologies over the period of time. There may be a case that Aleph Builders is currently working
with the same equipments which were used five years back, nevertheless, Glimmel Builders updated their instruments with the passage
of time and thus proved more effective towards constuction process. If so, then our construction cost will remain the same as it was before,
on the other hand, we can reduce cost by utilizing latest technologies from Glimmel Builders. Hence, to strengthen the argument,
we need to perform a study about latest projects of these two builders.
Lastly, it is also stated that five years back, the contracts for two builders were "nearly identical". Are they 100 percent same?
May be there is one bedroom less than other, so the cost will remain the same? How much cost should fluctuate? The assumption needs to cater
so that one can differente the overall cost.
The author has an interesting deduction with the past events, however, these hypothesis are made from assumptions which may or
may not be correct. While the records are of five years back, one should consider their latest projects to make a good choice. Moreover,
study involved percentages which lead to vagueness and actual overall cost cannot be deduced.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 37 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2102 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.73 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.163 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.514 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.244 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.734 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 21 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sumptions which may or may not be valid, under certain circumstances. The supposi...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Of
...nd cannot lead to practical inference of overall cost. One cannot determine the ...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Of
...al figures. What is the actual amount of 20 percent more? What is 10 percent mor...
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Line 13, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are not sure about either 20 percent of construction is more than 10 percent of ...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Construction
... not sure about either 20 percent of construction is more than 10 percent of maintainance...
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Line 15, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssumed that 20 percent construction cost is higher than 10 percent of maintainanc...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...ed that 20 percent construction cost is higher than 10 percent of maintainance ...
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Line 23, column 119, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rategy of work five years back and now. While this supposition can be true, it can ...
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Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Can
... back and now. While this supposition can be true, it can be false due to advance...
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Line 25, column 74, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...to advancement in technologies over the period of time. There may be a case that Aleph Builder...
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Line 25, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that Aleph Builders is currently working with the same equipments which were used...
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Line 29, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Of
...ed their instruments with the passage of time and thus proved more effective tow...
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Line 31, column 42, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'utilizing the latest'.
Suggestion: utilizing the latest
...n the other hand, we can reduce cost by utilizing latest technologies from Glimmel Builders. Hen...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 33, column 28, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'about the latest'.
Suggestion: about the latest
... argument, we need to perform a study about latest projects of these two builders. La...
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Line 41, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ctuate? The assumption needs to cater so that one can differente the overall cos...
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Line 41, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ctuate? The assumption needs to cater so that one can differente the overall cost. ...
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Line 47, column 72, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this hypothesis' or 'these hypotheses', 'these hypothesises'?
Suggestion: this hypothesis; these hypotheses; these hypothesises
...eduction with the past events, however, these hypothesis are made from assumptions which may or ...
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Line 47, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s are made from assumptions which may or may not be correct. While the records ar...
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Line 49, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...e made from assumptions which may or may not be correct. While the records are o...
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Line 49, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rojects to make a good choice. Moreover, study involved percentages which lead to...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, thus, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18202764977 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87447175417 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472350230415 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.9994398907 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7826086957 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8695652174 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.15768463074 407% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1919953387 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651188087087 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524037257749 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0635709939511 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584138021692 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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