Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings
are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe
specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and
explain how these examples shape your position.
Schools should not cut funds for extracurricular activities to repair buildings because qualifying funds will result in less learning and increase mental stress. However, if a school has limited funds and an urgent need than repairing can be justified.
Recently a concept of Early Childhood Development is introduced globally to focus on early education of students. "Learn with Fun": A
slogan related to the ECD concept underscores the importance of FUN in education. The FUN part begins when a children is introduced to
games, physical and mental activities etc. Schools in Pakistan are implementing this concept to make their children grows exponentially.
It is noted that extracurricular activities plays an essential roles in learning as well. Thus, cutting funds for repairing
buildings is not justified.
It is common to witness suicidal attempts in adulthood. What is the considereable factor to think of suicide? Most people
link these attempts with paucity of stress management skills. A skill which most of the people learn at their school life by participating in extracurricular activities. Pressure of studies is neutralized by playing sports like cricket, badminton etc to divert mind from studies. Most academic renowned schools in US provides opportunities for their students to groom in extracurricular
activities. In essence, schools should not cut funding for extracurricular activities as it is vital for student's grooming.
While extracurricular activties are important for students, one cannot ignore the worst case scenario. If a building not strong enough to hold infrastructure and school is less in funding then it is justified to cut funds for other activities which eventually includes extracurricular activities. Nevertheless, keeping in view of importance of extracurricular activities,
an exception can be made by considering taking loans. Further, there are school in Pakistan where infrastructure is below standards still focussing on children physical and mental activities.
To conclude, extracurricular activities are necessary for an individual. It helps in releasing stress and increasing learning curve. So it should be
compromised until there is some urgent need.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... students. 'Learn with Fun': A slogan related to the ECD concept unders...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Slogan
...dents. 'Learn with Fun': A slogan related to the ECD concept underscores ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 108, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... in education. The FUN part begins when a children is introduced to games, physical and ...
^^^^^^^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Games
...gins when a children is introduced to games, physical and mental activities etc. Sc...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 64, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'role'?
Suggestion: role
...urricular activities plays an essential roles in learning as well. Thus, cutting fund...
^^^^^
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... well. Thus, cutting funds for repairing buildings is not justified. It i...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Buildings
...l. Thus, cutting funds for repairing buildings is not justified. It is common ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Link
...ctor to think of suicide? Most people link these attempts with paucity of stress m...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Activities
... students to groom in extracurricular activities. In essence, schools should not cut fun...
^^^^^^^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Compromised
...asing learning curve. So it should be compromised until there is some urgent need.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.86404833837 5.05705443957 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40503086255 2.79657885939 122% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552870090634 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3778229495 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.2272727273 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0454545455 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77272727273 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.97078651685 262% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289334552028 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823498562271 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774112650775 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995286619742 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872651404205 0.0667264976115 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.12 12.1639044944 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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