Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings
are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe
specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and
explain how these examples shape your position.
Although Schools are known as institutes where students mainly learn academic aspects , I largely disagree with the recommendation that schools need to compensate on costs of extracurricular activities if school buildings need repair beacuse cutting down on extracurricualr activities is not the only solution and it can impact the school and its students in other egregious ways.
Schools are resposnible for teaching students various academic aspects such as science, history, math etc.. although these academic aspects are important for a student to succeed ,extracurricular activities are equally important for the overall development of students.So if the school were to cut down on extracurriculars it would impact the students in a negative way . Thats beacuse extracurriculars like say sports , music ,dance, art etc.. not only help students relax from academic pressures it also helps them develop skills like communication , team spirit , stress control etc.. Consider the game of football a player on the field needs to communicate well with his teammates about stratergies , mingle with everyone for the team to succeed ,control and moderate his temper in pressure situations . These skills become rudimentary when a student has a career of his own in somecases even when comapred to academic skills . Because jobs these days test how well a person can survive , handle pressure , mingle with others and then see how good his academic skills are .Some extracurriculars like say art helps develop creative thinking in childern ,because in painting the transaltion of thoughts into colors demands students be creative think differently in order to stand out .Further more extracurriculars can bring out the hiden talent in students when given proper recognition and training students can even build a career out of these extracurriculars as sportpersons, actors, composers and what not... So reduced funding for these activities would not only prevent the developement of these skills but also deny this world of great artists, sportpersons, etc...
Given the importance that these extracurriculars have on students , the school can find other ways to fund the building repair . For example schools can cut down on operational costs such as providing free beverage to its faculty members ,or say reduce funding on other aesthetic but less important aspects such as mainiting a garden , having classrooms with glass cabinets or anything that doesnt impact the students as much as cutting down omn extracurriculars. Schools as an alternate can also urge parents for a increased fee for that particular to fund repair activities , explaining the imapct of the steps school is forced to take if they dont get the funding.
Despite of all disadvatages cutting down on extracurriculars has there are extreme cases where this might be the right thing to do . Consider a school which spends extravagently on extracurriculars like may be it is maintaining a large number of faculty as comapred to the recommended faculty to student ratio for these extracurriculars , it has more than the required number of grounds ,auditoriums , instruments needed to pursue these extracurriculars which are lying unused and the building that needs repair has classrooms where students sit , then schools are right to cut down on these activities.
To summarize , cutting down on extracurriculars has a large negative impact on a students development so schools should find other ways to fund the building repairs. However, in some cases if the extracurriculars are already funded more than what is required then schools can divert the funds for building activities ensuring adequate stress is given on extracurriculars .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, well, for example, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3119.0 2235.4752809 140% => OK
No of words: 574.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43379790941 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22721827866 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463414634146 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 950.4 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 138.806914003 60.3974514979 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.9375 118.986275619 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.875 23.4991977007 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 49.0 7.80617977528 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276621993992 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110359399369 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590936786197 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193152436505 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033490891951 0.0667264976115 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.1 14.1392134831 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 48.8420337079 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.1743820225 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.