The argument is flawed with numerous unstated assumptions. The argument has made comparisons between the trend of alpaca overcoat five years ago and the present demand. Deriving a conclusion based on assumptions makes the argument to fall apart.
The main assumption that argument has made is about the expectation of consumer demand for Sartorian’s alpaca overcoat will be same as five years ago. The modern society is replete with influx of new models in clothing world. If a particular style was famous five years ago, we can’t guarantee the same demand in the present. Had the argument provided the present consumer demand for alpaca overcoats of other companies or the the present status of alpaca overcoats’ trend in clothing world, the argument could have supported its claim.
Secondly, the argument has mentioned about a new fabric supplier and resuming alpaca overcoats production. There is no comparison provided for the old and new supplier’s fabric quality. And the production had difficulty in obtaining reliable supplies from the old supplier. There is no data given about the reliability of new supplier and the conclusion has been made based on this unstated assumption. Had the argument provided the detailed comparison of the wool quality between the old and new supplier and the reliablity of the new supplier, the argument could have been strengthened its view.
Finally, the argument has concluded about the expectation of Sarotian’s alpaca overcoats overall profit to the company based on the consumer’s outcry when they discontinued the product. And also the author has mentioned a fact that there were none of their competitors to offer a comparable product. Since it has happened five years ago and there were no other alternate brand to fulfill their place, we can’t expect the same in the present time. The argument could have strengthened its point, if it has provided the present competitive companies that produces alpaca overcoats.
Had the argument considered the time gap and given more details to prove that current alpaca overcoats trend, mindful about the competitors of the present time, provided more details about the new supplier’s reliability and fabric’s quality comparing with old supplier to ensure the alpaca overcoats’ overall quality, the argument could have strengthened its decision more. Making a conclusion without these details won’t produce the expected results.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 2005 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.235 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.671 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.953 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.278 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... alpaca overcoats of other companies or the the present status of alpaca overcoats&apos...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... alpaca overcoats of other companies or the the present status of alpaca overcoats&apos...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52356020942 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00475669789 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439790575916 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.3111242254 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.222222222 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284705691744 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987221512212 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681965164811 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161115827289 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648417009919 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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