folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a
recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on
lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first
week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but
wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication.
As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the
third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This
shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.
*A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of
medicine, ones that developed before the advent of modern medical services and technology.
. In these memo, the author concludes that the scent in lavender flowers has now been proved effective for the cure of chronic disease named insomnia. To bolster the conclusion, the author performed experiment on thirty chronic insomnia volunteers who slept each night on lavender scented pillows on separate rooms for three week and they are strongly monitored. During such experiment, the author note various changes on each week: (1) at first week, volunteers slept soundly but after woke they felt tired (2) during second week, they took medication less soundly and woke up feeling extreme tired (3) at third week, volunteers slept completely and felt less tired than previous two weeks. Close scrutiny of each these facts however reveals that none of them lends no credible evidence to support the conclusion.
First, the author readily assumes that taking slept in lavender scented pillows helps to cure insomnia quite effectively. If this is the case, then every person who have such problems will utilize such methodologies quite sincerely and they never tried to visits expensive clinics, which definitely helps them to save their money. Thus, only sleeping on such sophisticated pillows will never cure the diseases permanently. Therefore, the author fails to mention the appropriate methods that can be applied to cure such diseases.
Secondly, the argument could have been much clearer if the author vividly defined the experimental process. In experiment, it has been said that person who is extremely tired and slept clumsily at second week, got perfectly chilled in third week. This does not sound quite appropriate and definitely can put spectators on dilemma because there is no such chronic diseases which can be cure with a period of a week. Therefore, the argument provides no viable evidence to support the conclusion.
Finally, the argument fails to mention one of the key factors on the basis of which it could have been evaluated, if such traditional practices cure the diseases quite effectively, then why such methods and practices aren't so praised globally. Similarly, people who got complete cured from such methods are not pointed out in the above memo. Likewise, the validity of such practices are not properly figured out and several statistics report regarding its effectiveness is lacking behind. Thus, the argument remains unsubstantiated and become open to debate.
To sum up, the argument relies on dubious assumptions that renders unconvincing as it stands. To bolster the conclusion, the author must provide clear evidence perhaps by a local study or survey; several different tutorials regarding the absolute cure of this diseases is now going to be uploaded on you tube channels, different expertise are now hired so as to provide proper and innocuous care and several such services will now extent in different parts of the world to make people belief on such curable practices.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2396 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.109 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.584 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.479 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
. In these memo, the author concludes tha...
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Line 1, column 6, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this memo' or 'these memos'?
Suggestion: this memo; these memos
. In these memo, the author concludes that the scent in...
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Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...clusion, the author performed experiment on thirty chronic insomnia volunteers wh...
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Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on lavender scented pillows on separate rooms for three week and they are strong...
^^
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'week' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'weeks'.
Suggestion: weeks
...ed pillows on separate rooms for three week and they are strongly monitored. During...
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Line 1, column 689, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...elt less tired than previous two weeks. Close scrutiny of each these facts however reveals tha...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'visit'.
Suggestion: visit
...quite sincerely and they never tried to visits expensive clinics, which definitely hel...
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Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot perfectly chilled in third week. This does not sound quite appropriate and def...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ly, then why such methods and practices arent so praised globally. Similarly, people ...
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Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ence perhaps by a local study or survey; several different tutorials regarding th...
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Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...ce perhaps by a local study or survey; several different tutorials regarding the absolute cure o...
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Line 9, column 257, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...utorials regarding the absolute cure of this diseases is now going to be uploaded on...
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Line 9, column 355, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nels, different expertise are now hired so as to provide proper and innocuous care and s...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, likewise, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, third, thus, as to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25427350427 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66476242962 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.1760965836 57.8364921388 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.611111111 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195613993725 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659176213773 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996262758681 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101086622169 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102241636724 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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