The following appeared in the annual report from the president of national brush company.
“In order to save money, we at the National Brush Company have decided to pay our employees for each brush they produce instead of for time they spend producing brushes. We believe that this policy will lead to production of more and better brushes, will allow us to reduce our staff size, and will enable the company factories to operate fewer hours – resulting savings on electricity and security costs. These changes will ensure that the best workers keep their jobs and that the company will earn a profit in coming year.
In the annual report of National Brush Company stated that, In order to save money, they are going to pay employees for each brush they produce instead of working hours. He also mentioned about reducing cost by reducing staff size, and attrition of working hours which after all leads towards electricity savings and security cost degradation. With this type of policy they want as result is best workers keep their job and company will earn profit in next year. However this argument by president is full of unaddressed assumption and with inconsistencies. So, this argument is deeply flawed.
President considering option for paying is number of brush employee produced instead of paying by number of working hours. But this leads towards low quality brushes. As low quality brushes comes into the market and betrayed by customers. Though company has to pay each employee for number of brushes As this will give him chance of lucrative job. If number of hours is fixed and salary is fixed by working hours then employee does not feel pressure about work or aver about making more brushes and more money. If president’s paying option is considered by company then it leads towards more destruction of reputation in the market as quality of brush degrades and complain increases. So, This policy can’t be accepted.
President mentioned that by using policy mentioned in first point they produce more and better brushes, and it is resulting as reduce staff size, and reduction of factory hours which results as savings in electricity and security costs. Even though this seems correct, this is chaotic. As they want to increase production per person but keep overall production same. So they are eventually going to reduce their staff size plus reduction of factory hours for saving electricity. However, per person number of brushes production is increasing does not result as better brushes instead it leads to low quality brushes. Now, they are going to reduce staff and working ours. This means they are going to produce low quality brushes for saving money of electricity. Instead of this company can choose quality making quality brushes and working for whole day shift wise with old working hours policy for salary. As this leads to more brushes with good quality. Then sell increases and profit will be earned in next year.
President said that using this policy keep best employer in job and earn profit next year. Here, President used vague language as this which kind of best employer. One that makes more brush or good brush. If number of brush increase but quality decrease then it affect the business in bad way as People choose quality over quantity. So, this point reduce the chance of brush company to increase revenue and earn profit in next year.
The argument above weakens basis of suggestion given in the president’s article because this article may posses merit but President forget to consider many points. So, company has to research about this point and consider other parameters before instead of putting blind trust in President’s suggestion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2516 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.35 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.552 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.139 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.586 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.424 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...this type of policy they want as result is best workers keep their job and company will...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 464, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... company will earn profit in next year. However this argument by president is full of u...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'brushes'' or 'brush's'?
Suggestion: brushes'; brush's
...rds low quality brushes. As low quality brushes comes into the market and betrayed by c...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 882, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'hours'' or 'hour's'?
Suggestion: hours'; hour's
...r whole day shift wise with old working hours policy for salary. As this leads to mor...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 907, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...th old working hours policy for salary. As this leads to more brushes with good qu...
^^
Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'keep the best'.
Suggestion: keep the best
... President said that using this policy keep best employer in job and earn profit next ye...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
... used vague language as this which kind of best employer. One that makes more brush or ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...h increase but quality decrease then it affect the business in bad way as People choos...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, after all, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 11.1786427146 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2593.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 509.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09430255403 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51283081165 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414538310413 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0669048922 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4137931034 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5517241379 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44827586207 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316280870864 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100113731418 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118326283881 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194937361215 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807201778035 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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