The following appeared in an article written by
Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist,
visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his
observations that children in Tertia were reared by
an entire village rather than by their own biological
parents. However, my recent interviews with
children living in the group of islands that includes
Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than
about other adults in the village. This research of
mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about
Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the
observation-centered approach to studying cultures
is invalid as well. The interview-centered method
that my team of graduate students is currently
using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate
understanding of child-rearing traditions there and
in other island cultures.”
In the claim, recent studies compare results with 20 years old research. The time gap may create significant amount of change in social etiquettes and behavior. The gradual westernization may affect this part of the world for more insular family upbringing.
The second study has spread over islands other than Tertia. There’s a possibility that more ethnic groups which not in Tertia offsets study results.
There’s no proof what kind of questions asked in the interviews in the latter study. If the questions were not specific on the subject the answers may not reveal the true objectives.
The statement declining observer-based study based on one comparison is not worthy of the claim, which should be a comparison of a series of studies.
The qualifications of interviewees are not put forward in the second study as per the first is commenced by a renowned professional.
Futher suggesting interview-based method for all anthropology studies may not be fair since the contexts may diversify requiring various methods.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d for more insular family upbringing. The second study has spread over islands ot...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in the interviews in the latter study. If the questions were not specific on the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 2.0 28.8173652695 7% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 55.5748502994 34% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 2260.96107784 39% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 164.0 441.139720559 37% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38414634146 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 4.56307096286 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10649637858 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 204.123752495 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670731707317 0.468620217663 143% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 705.55239521 37% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7104510588 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.3 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0578677761072 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266766023503 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348175991906 0.0701772020484 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0285856260758 0.128457276422 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427538163796 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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