The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that the two interviews taken in a time difference of twenty years is similar, rendering to the main conclusion, that the conclusion of Dr. Field is not accurate, invalid.
The argument fails to provide any justification regarding the issue of the time. It is assumed that what held true in twenty years ago will hold true in recent time. The argument fails to provide the cultural or economic condition in recent times in the island. Twenty years ago, the parents might be workaholic and didn’t provide sufficient time for their children. Therefore, they were reared by the other village people. However, situation will not be similar nowadays. Maybe the children now spend most of their time with parents.
Had the argument provided any justification about the population density of that island and then it has to further attribute necessary information regarding the family number carrying children and the age of the children.
The argument has also many unanswered assumptions. The child bearing tradition can be changed within twenty years or the children will more likely to spend times in playing with other children rather than with the rearing person. After twenty years, maybe the mothers of the family spend more time in rearing their children. The economic condition of the island now maybe well enough to serve the family with the single income source. Therefore, a child gets more time to enjoy with their biological parents.
Based on the unwarranted assumptions that the situation of the island is similar to that of twenty years ago fails to make a convincing case that the observation of Dr. Field is invalid.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 287 350
No. of Characters: 1431 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.116 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.986 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.558 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.902 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17482517483 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65920987031 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475524475524 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.8816541188 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149054897033 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516089954544 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475277390326 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983576369992 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431168588493 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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