The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this article about the culture and the child-rearing of the Childerns in Tertia, Dr.Karp assert that based on some arguments their method is valid while the previous method by Dr. Feild is invalid. However Dr. Karp does not provide enough appealing evidence about his assertion.
In Dr. Feild methods, he indicates that they performed the research in the several islands that one of them is Tertia. However here in this article there is no information that Dr. Field's conclusion is a group average on all the islands or just the Tortia. To compare the two results, Dr. Karp should provide evidence that his conclusion is based on the unique and separate result just from Tertia island and is not affected by the other cultures.
Dr. Feild concluded that the children in Tortia are reared but the whole village rather than their biological parents. Dr. Karp assert that because the children were taking more about they biological parents the conclusion of Dr. Feild is wrong. Here, there should be an evidence that, the children were taking about what subjects exactly about their biological parents. It is possible that they were talking about the problems they have with their parents and they are appose to the actions of their parents. Plus, just talking about their parents, does not prove that the parent's actions and behavior are mirrored in their children. There should be another evidence, to show and link children taking about their parents to their routine actions otherwise this argument can be refuted.
Building upon the fact that Dr. Karp knows Dr. Feild's conclusion wrong, he also claims that their process which leaded to that conclusion is invalid as well. The observation- centered process, performed by Dr. Field might be still valid even though that the conclusion is not. Dr. Karp should provide evidence the procedure in which Dr. Feild reached that conclusion is performed correctly and analyze all the aspects of it. If proved that every steps is performed correctly then we can deduce the conclusion is invalid as well.
Also Dr. Karp's graduate students performed an interview-centered method to evaluate the child-rearing culture in the Turtia village. There should be evidence about the validity of the questions in the interview. If the questions, are only centered about the children's biological parent is it not surprising that they were talking more about them in the interviews. The valid interview should be impartial and disspationate to prove Dr. Karp's conclusion is indisputable.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2078 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.031 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.545 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.82 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.183 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...-rearing of the Childerns in Tertia, Dr.Karp assert that based on some arguments the...
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Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'asserts'.
Suggestion: asserts
...ing of the Childerns in Tertia, Dr.Karp assert that based on some arguments their meth...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Karp) must be used with a third-person verb: 'asserts'.
Suggestion: asserts
...ing of the Childerns in Tertia, Dr.Karp assert that based on some arguments their meth...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...revious method by Dr. Feild is invalid. However Dr. Karp does not provide enough appeal...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ral islands that one of them is Tertia. However here in this article there is no inform...
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Line 9, column 471, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'apposed'.
Suggestion: apposed
...ey have with their parents and they are appose to the actions of their parents. Plus, ...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 426, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ctly and analyze all the aspects of it. If proved that every steps is performed co...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...he conclusion is invalid as well. Also Dr. Karps graduate students performed a...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, then, well, while, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17961165049 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.596347776 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436893203883 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4791832144 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.315789474 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6842105263 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228401353896 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864069878878 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545910607682 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146507414011 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385414094258 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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