The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument given by Dr. Karp that interview-centred method is a better than observation-centred method in case of understanding child-rearing traditions of Tertia and other islands is clearly rife with many loopholes and tenuous assumptions. The assumptions made for drawing out this conclusion are invalid and makes it a three-legged table.
The conclusion drawn by Dr. Field using observation-centerd approach is twenty years old and declaring it as invalid on the basis of a study which is going on recently does not seem to be fair. This long time should be considered before making assumptions that the results of earlier study were incorrect. It is plausible that the traditions in Tertia might have changed in this span of time. When previous study might have been conducted the child-rearing practices would have been exactly like the observations made by the earlier team. Without providing an evidence that on what parameters are these approaches being judged this assumption will easily fall apart.
Secondly, the assumption that the interviews conducted by new team have provided accurate results is precarious as well. The children might still be reared by the whole village but as they spend more time with their biological parents can be the reason for swayed interviews. The reason that children did not talk enough about other villagers does not correlate to child-rearing traditions. Moreover, how many children were interviewed, was the sample big enough to generalize, whether the children were single child or had siblings because if it was a single child then he would have spent more time with his parents; issues like these have not been considered here. Proper answers for these questions are required to strengthen this argument.
Lastly, making an assumption about the current study which is still under process, will provide definite conclusions is dubious. Once the results are out and after that making a conclusion like this would make much more sense. The results of the interview-based study are missing from the argument which is much needed to corroborate it.
It is evident from the above statements that the argument provided by Dr. Karp is weak and is based on fallacious assumptions. Interview-based approach may be correct and can produce correct results but these answers are surely needed to come to this conclusion.
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...is twenty years old and declaring it as invalid on the basis of a study which is going ...
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...ight have changed in this span of time. When previous study might have been conducte...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.208955223881 0.25644967241 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.208955223881 0.15541462614 134% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114427860697 0.0836205057962 137% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0572139303483 0.0520304965353 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0248756218905 0.0272364105082 91% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126865671642 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0820895522388 0.0416121511921 197% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.01497364293 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0174129353234 0.026700313972 65% => OK
Particles: 0.00248756218905 0.001811407834 137% => OK
Determiners: 0.106965174129 0.113004496875 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0298507462687 0.0255425247493 117% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0149253731343 0.0127820249294 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2368.0 2731.13054187 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.26455026455 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.357142857143 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.277777777778 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.198412698413 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142857142857 0.135150697306 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01497364293 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 207.018472906 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521164021164 0.469332199767 111% => OK
Word variations: 56.9645468212 52.1807786196 109% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2352941176 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9806991063 57.7814097925 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.294117647 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.647058823529 0.724660767414 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 50.0130718954 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.4358974359 1.8405768891 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25526598042 0.441005458295 58% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114543251878 0.135418324435 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0796630762571 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527719831199 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137369330019 0.147661913831 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951280874868 0.193483328276 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536872252423 0.0970749176394 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.326531406399 0.42659136922 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0430767238969 0.0774707102158 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157357204383 0.312017818177 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485591118861 0.0698173142475 70% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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