The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
The following argument appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, who is an anthropologist stating that the interview centered method establishes a much more accurate understanding of child rearing tradition in Tertia and nearby islands. However, he contrasts with the Dr. Field’s conclusion stating that observation-centered approach is invalid. His interviews with children living in the group of island including Tertia shows that these children spend much time talking about their biological parents rather than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp finally jumps into the conclusion supporting interview-centered method that his team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia and invaliding observation centered approach by Dr. Field. However, the conclusion establishes by the Dr. Karp is not complete enough and his argument needs to be properly evaluated along with explaining unwarranted assumptions before asserting any conclusion.
Firstly, Dr. Karp talks about the study of Dr. Field who is also an anthropologist which was studied twenty years ago. In his study, Dr. Field concluded from his observation that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their biological parents. However, Dr. Karp fails to give any evidence regarding tradition may change in nearly two decades. In the last twenty years, children start rearing by their own biological parents rather than by an entire village. Dr. Karp should consider all the evidence of parenthood before jumping to any conclusion.
Secondly, Dr. Karp states his recent interview with the children of Tertia. But, he fails to explain any statistical data regarding the number of children who participates in his interview. He fails to submit any statistical data regarding the total number of children in Tertia and its nearly by islands. He again fails to state any data and category of children of various age group. The criteria of interview are not explained in the argument or the pattern of questions asked by interviewer to children. He also fails to state the time period does the child spend during his interview: Either, he is alone or with his biological parents. If the children are with their biological parents, they definitely talk about the member who is around him. Hence, Dr. Karp fails to consider all these assumptions.
Thirdly, Dr. Karp acknowledges his conclusion over Dr. Field. Dr. Karp refutes the conclusion asserted by Dr. Field regarding observation centered method is invalid. However, Dr. Karp fails to present any evidence why Dr. Field observation is invalid. Eitherthe process used by Dr. Field twenty years was popular and used by other contemporizes in that time period; but, has some limitations with the travelling of two decades. Dr. Karp, however, fails to present any evidence regarding the method used by Dr. Field.
Moreover, Dr. Karp, presents that the interview centered method is using by his team of graduate student to study the child rearing tradition in Tertia and nearby islands. However, Dr. Karp fails to state any methodologies used by his team. He also fails to represent any procedure regarding the interview centered method used by his team. Either the team mates are the experience ones or the new ones who has done the interview. Either the report present by his team is authentic or fabricated. Either they are following the same pattern to take the interview or pattern of questions are varying among the interviewers. Hence, Dr. Karp fails to present any evidences related to these unstated assumptions.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands is full of unwarranted assumptions. Dr. Karp needs to explain all these unstated assumptions in the form of systematic research before presenting any conclusion regarding the interview centered method is much more accurate in understanding the child rearing tradition in Tertia and his surrounding islands.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 622 350
No. of Characters: 3234 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.994 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.199 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.841 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 243 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 190 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 136 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 91 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.778 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.719 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.404 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.203 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...by his team is authentic or fabricated. Either they are following the same pattern to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 55.5748502994 175% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3306.0 2260.96107784 146% => OK
No of words: 622.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31511254019 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99398916966 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90822814885 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.363344051447 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 995.4 705.55239521 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.8449604385 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3125 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365304991498 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115610518737 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105424954109 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223545451597 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136970991411 0.0628817314937 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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