The following appeared in an article written by Dr.Karp , an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr.Field, anoted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his own obseravtions that children in Tertia were rearedby an entire village rather than bytheir own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islamds that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr.Field`s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centerd approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is cuurently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures. "
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument .
While it may be true that Dr. Karp had gone to the island of Tertia to study about the culture of that place and let us even assume that he proved the conclusion by Dr.Field wrong . But the arguments written by him in the article does not make his research clear . There are certain loopholes and assumptions attached to it .
In the very first statement it is mentioned that both , Dr.Karp and Dr. Field , are anthropologists by profession . Anthropologists are those who study human race from the very beginning of life . Then how come both of them are researching about cultures and traditions . According to their profession , their research should be based on origin of life on Tertia , human life on that island etc .
The second loophole found in the argument was when Dr. Field concluded that children of that particular place were reared by the entire village rather than by their own biological parents . The main problem is how can one single child be raised by the entire village . Also every couple in that region would have their own child . According to the given argument the parents in that region were in a habit of looking after every other child in that village except theirs . It is human nature that we always tend to take care and protect the ones who are close. Humans never leave their own relationships and take care of someone else`s .
The opinion placed by Dr.Karp is that his team of graduate students is currently presently in Tertia and is trying interview-centered approach to understand child-rearing traditions there. Firstly , his team is already working on their research and before this it is mentioned that he had proved the argument made by other anthropologiist invalid . Dr.Karp himself had not reached to his own conclusions and he has started crticising someone else`s .
The next mistake found in the article above is that in the last statement the main focus is regarding studying child-rearing traditions and just before that it was written that both the researchers were trying to study cultures of that island . It is not right to compare tradition related to some specific type and culture related to the whole village . It will always lead to erroneous result.
It is always a nice step to volunteer and do research on some new regions with newly developed methods . But before reaching to a conclusion and criticising someone else`s findings , it is a nice practice to test our own .
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 1962 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.728 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.647 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.762 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.701 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92944038929 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77764893346 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484184914842 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6694413848 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4761904762 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61904761905 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 38.0 5.25449101796 723% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197451908676 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552790056367 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603606057909 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100152353996 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562803293376 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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