The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
It might be true that mopeds are the reason for increasing number of accidents in the island. This can also be correct that town council of the island are trying out several ways to control this problem. But the reasons explained by the author for this case are not strong enough and thus, will not make the readers believe the given claim. The claim stated above is rife with several assumptions and holes.
It has been said that town council is limiting the rental services of moped companies to reduce the number of accidents in Balmer island. Here it has been assumed that the accidents are caused only due to mopeds. The town council , leave alone , giving attention to any other causes , is not even finding any other cause of this problem. The second assumption is that limiting the number of rentals by the moped companies ,from 50 percent to 25, will decrease the number of accidents by half. Any step that has been taken for welfare by the society has neither been completely error free nor fully successful in any part of the world. Even if the government of the country will spread complete awareness about this among people and will control all the transportation companies. There might be some companies and people who will disobey this rule. The mopeds companies will never want any loss for themselves. What all of them unite together and start organising rallies against the government. The author is assuming that this problem solving approach was successful in Seaville, neighbouring island , so it will be the same in Balmer. The successful events depend on how the companies and citizens of the country respond to that step. It might be in Balmer, this will not be accepted as much as it was in Seaville.
The step to control this problem could have been in a better position if the government of the island make certain traffic rules and impose huge fines on rule breakers. Making proper footpaths for pedestrians and roads for mopeds will improve the situation. Initiating the use of public vehicles will also help.
For example, there was one campaign 'Swacch Bharat Abhiyan' launched in India. It was spread in each and every part of the country. But the result was not as good as the advertisement of the campaign was. Any step taken can never be fully successful. Also few years back, a concept of 'odd-even' was launched in Delhi to control the pollution. But it was not as good as it was in China. Any step that was successful in some other place, does not mean that it will be the same in other parts of the world.
The reasoning stated by the author could have been more logically sound if he or she would have said that liming rental services will not help. But limiting the number of moped import in the island as well as number of moped companies will help. If town councils ban moped rental services, it might be that people start purchasing their own ways of transportation. Only sticking to this moped reason will not eradicate this problem. Finding other causes to this problem and focusing on that will lead to reduction of the issue in a better way.
A safe, accident-free nation in wanted by every citizen. This will not only make a better quality life of residents but will also lead to increased tourism. For attaining such goals, the town council is following the right path. However, this author`s argument is not significant enough to believe the urgency of the problem.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 35 15
No. of Words: 597 350
No. of Characters: 2755 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.943 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.615 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.346 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.057 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.942 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.457 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.237 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.435 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.039 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sed only due to mopeds. The town council , leave alone , giving attention to any ...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o mopeds. The town council , leave alone , giving attention to any other causes ,...
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Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mopeds. The town council , leave alone , giving attention to any other causes , i...
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Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... , giving attention to any other causes , is not even finding any other cause of ...
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Line 7, column 423, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...number of rentals by the moped companies ,from 50 percent to 25, will decrease the...
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Line 7, column 861, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use ''.
... who will disobey this rule. The mopeds companies will never want any loss for themselves...
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Line 7, column 1102, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cessful in Seaville, neighbouring island , so it will be the same in Balmer. The s...
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Line 15, column 250, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ep taken can never be fully successful. Also few years back, a concept of odd-even w...
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Line 19, column 86, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had said'?
Suggestion: had said
... been more logically sound if he or she would have said that liming rental services will not he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, thus, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2848.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 597.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77051926298 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44371639135 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427135678392 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 860.4 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 19.7664670659 177% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.706585077 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.3714285714 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0571428571 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.02857142857 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112102051946 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351849044271 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603459262482 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638587867465 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386926116715 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.3550499002 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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