The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.
"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college students, colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which teachers closely monitored students. Under that system, teachers reported an average of thirty cases of cheating per year. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."
The student newspaper of Groveton College suggests to introduce the honor code similar to the Groveton college to reduce the number of cheating cases among college students. The author backs his claim by providing the reason that, the number of cheating cases after placing the new honor code number of cheating cases have reduced drastically. Hence, he recommends Groveton college honor code for other colleges and universities struggling with a high number of cheating among students. However, the author has ignored many assumptions which are crucial to evaluate the argument.
Firstly, the author argues that there is a consistent decrease in the number of cheating cases among students at Groveton College. However, there is a lack of data to validate this claim. As there is only one year of data available for the old honor code, which is insufficient to say that it is inferior to the new honor code. Based on the information provide in the argument students agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors, but there is no guarantee that students will obey this agreement. In fact, there is a possibility that the students will cheat openly and will encourage others for cheating as there will not be anyone to monitor them.
Secondly, the new honor code is like you are saying lion to not hunt which is impossible. The students with the greed of getting high marks will cheat without any fear in the new honor code. However, the author is saying that this new system is more successful due to a decrease in the number of cheating cases. The decrease in the number of cheating cases may be due to a large number of good and bright students admitting to Groveton college. There is also a possibility that the number of students getting admitted to Groveton college is decreasing hence, there is a low number of cheating cases among students.
Thirdly, the students saying that with the new honor code system they will less likely to cheat but really can we trust? There is a lack of evidence that shows that this decrease in the number of cheating cases among students is due to the new honor code. There is also no way we can assume that the new honor code is better than the old honor code.
To sum up, the author could have provided more data to prove his point. There is a lack of pieces of evidence and the argument is based on several assumptions hence, it will not be right to say that the new honor code is better than the old one and it will work with all colleges, universities.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2018 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.586 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.361 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.953 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.204 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests introducing'.
Suggestion: suggests introducing
...e student newspaper of Groveton College suggests to introduce the honor code similar to the Groveton ...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... number of cheating cases may be due to a large number of good and bright students admitting to G...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, may, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70454545455 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43376727328 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.368181818182 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9160476341 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.947368421 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1578947368 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272013790909 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110458221029 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111228659107 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173614765947 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100330985526 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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