The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora."Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens

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The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.

"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author argues here that the economy decline is the reason behind the current lower level of fitness not using computers as experts suggest. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention many several keys in the basis it could be evaluated. In support of this conclusion, the author notes that the low expenses on fitness-related products is low this year. However, careful scrutiny of evidence reveals it provides little credible support to the author's conclusion. Hence, the argument can be considered incomplete and unsubstantiated.

First of all, the argument readily compare between the number of high-fitness residents between this year and 20 years ago. The author mentioned that one-half of all Corpora's resident in the past and quarter at this year. He didn't mention the whole figures of population in that two times. It does not make sense to compare between only two ratios without knowing the exact number.

Secondly, the author points out that the overall fitness levels are highest in the regions of Corpora where is owners of computer are highest. This is a merely an assumption made without much solid ground. For example, have he implemented a survey to prove that assumption? The argument would have been much more convincing if it had statistical survey to prove that assumptions.

Thirdly, the author cites that the reason is not using computer. This again is a weak and unsupported assumptions. He should implement on site interview to ask people about the actual reasons.

Finally, the argument concludes that the decline in economic is the main problem of resident’s lower fitness this year. The author has not presented any numbers indicates that decline in economic. Without mentioning any reference or numbers that prove that decline, the reader is left with the impression that this conclusion is only wishful thinking.
In conclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author should provide more concrete evidence. Perhaps by way off detailed analysis of past-years expenses on fitness and current ones. The author should provide more information about the population of Corpora's resident now and in the past and the exact number of computers' owners in the highly fitness regions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...provides little credible support to the authors conclusion. Hence, the argument can be ...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...n the past and quarter at this year. He didnt mention the whole figures of population...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24175824176 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74827453526 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524725274725 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5998357184 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.9565217391 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8260869565 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10595008432 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0291801695681 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509413162402 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0524174582309 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042995379941 0.0628817314937 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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