Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

This topic raises the trovrsial issue of whether formal education tends to have some limits on our minds and spirits or not. Indisputably, formal education is our first step in learning trip. Neverthless, we have to continue earning knowledege by our self outside the formal education frame as well. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits.
First of all, the formal education gives the basics of knoweldge. I would like to point out that the basic of knoweldge is the key to new horizons. To illustarte further, look at the example of colledge student who takes basic courses in chemistry. After graduation, this student may work in chemistry research field. In this circumstace, his basic knoweldge opens the door to work. Consequently, the formal education make our minds and spirits free.
Furthermore, formal eduction is not the last stage in individual's educations. As we know that the human is keep learning as long as he stills alive. The individual can set his mind and spirits free by reading more. Any body is the first reponsible for exploring new fields.
Admittedly, formal education is very important for anybody. Many people doesn't have time to read and explore new fields. They usually depend on their base knoweldge gaining from formal education. So someone can claim by that evidence that the formal education restrain minds and spirits. But If anybody doesn't try to gain knowldge, his minds and spirits should be very limited. However, the above statemnet doesn't constitute that the formal education tends to restrain minds and spirits for us.
In conclusion, although formal education may tend to restrain minds and spirits in some cases, It is not true as it depends how anybody gain knoweldge. As long as some measurements are performed or some area are involved the formal education give us first step to free our minds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nds to restrain our minds and spirits. First of all, the formal education gives...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, in conclusion, first of all, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 317.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04731861199 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64212485923 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526813880126 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6145942388 60.3974514979 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.7272727273 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4090909091 23.4991977007 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236163052472 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791395214668 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712419497654 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139279109222 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480816069094 0.0667264976115 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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