The medical experts claim that low expenditures on fitness product and services have resulted in decline of Corpora's citizen from meeting adeqaute physical fitness. Experts provide evidences reagrding usage of computers and few evidences to support the claim. However, further analysis of evidences is required to tag the claim as legit.
Firstly, the expert provides partial statistics regarding decline in people meeting proper physical fitness from one half that was twenty years ago to one quarter. There might be chances of few physically fit people of Corpora moving out to different areas. Also, new people who are not physically fit moving in. The author must provide accurate figures of poeple who are physically fit with respect to each year and corrosponding to same public.
Secondly, author states that experts were mistaken that more usage of computers was not the reason for decline. There might be possibility that twenty years ago, more people who used computers gave equal amount of time to fitness. Accordingly, current people would spend more time on computers and would have given less time to physical fitness. Thus, leading to decline in their physical fitness. Hence, author must provide more evidences regarding amount of time spent on computer and physical fitness by the people from twenty years.
Finally, the experts claim that low expenditures on fitness related products and services also contributed to decline in physically fit population. It might be possible that more number of poeple would have relied on other methods to get fit such as doing push ups in their home, or going for a run inside the town. The author must state more evidences regarding this.
In summary, author must provide few evidences as listed above. Otherwise, the statement would stand unconvincing.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The medical experts claim that low expenditures on fitness product and services have resulted in decline of Corpora's citizen from meeting adeqaute physical fitness.
Error: adeqaute Suggestion: adequate
Sentence: Experts provide evidences reagrding usage of computers and few evidences to support the claim.
Error: reagrding Suggestion: regarding
Sentence: The author must provide accurate figures of poeple who are physically fit with respect to each year and corrosponding to same public.
Error: corrosponding Suggestion: corresponding
Error: poeple Suggestion: people
Sentence: It might be possible that more number of poeple would have relied on other methods to get fit such as doing push ups in their home, or going for a run inside the town.
Error: poeple Suggestion: people
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not OK. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 289 350
No. of Characters: 1488 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.123 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.149 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.46 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.219 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om one half that was twenty years ago to one quarter. There might be chances of f...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, in summary, such as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30103806228 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51745264053 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508650519031 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2859888094 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1176470588 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152853871661 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531095639636 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606876797298 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811170998482 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603885280238 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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