The author claims that president of Hobco company must consider southeastern Grilldon as next site to be construct their company. The reason being more people would visit it. Also, 88 percent of population are also good with the hobby company being built in Grilldon. Additionally, hobby business being increased by 300 precent and having large retiree population devoting ample time their hobbies. Though, evidences may look convincing, it has few loop holes and results in carefull analysis for this argument to stand credible.
First of all, the author claims that 88 percent have accepted of having hooby company in Grilldon. Perhaps, there might be a possibility that this population might be restricted to just two options of being accepting or rejecting the plan. Indeed, population would have been intrested in having parks or bookstores. This requires author to provide evidences that freedom were given to this population rather than being restricetd to two options.
Secondly, the author claims that hobby business increased by 300 percent and large retiree population have ample time for hobby. There might be possibility that residents from other part of Grilldon region would have arrived during the survey period. Also, retiree would have indulged in hobbies that does not forcefully requires to be present in hobco company. Thus, author must provide sufficient statistical data and evidences regarding retirees who were prone to devote time to hobbies provided by hobco company only.
To sum up, the author is required to promulgate certain evidences as mentioned above. Without the stated evidences it might be difficult to accept the argument as legit.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Additionally, hobby business being increased by 300 precent and having large retiree population devoting ample time their hobbies.
Error: precent Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Though, evidences may look convincing, it has few loop holes and results in carefull analysis for this argument to stand credible.
Error: carefull Suggestion: careful
Sentence: First of all, the author claims that 88 percent have accepted of having hooby company in Grilldon.
Error: hooby Suggestion: hobby
Sentence: Indeed, population would have been intrested in having parks or bookstores.
Error: intrested Suggestion: interested
Sentence: This requires author to provide evidences that freedom were given to this population rather than being restricetd to two options.
Error: restricetd Suggestion: restricted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1379 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.243 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.519 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.209 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for this argument to stand credible. First of all, the author claims that 88 ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...han being restricetd to two options. Secondly, the author claims that hobby b...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bies provided by hobco company only. To sum up, the author is required to pro...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ficult to accept the argument as legit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 263.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38783269962 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57008345718 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54752851711 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.0636084018 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.4666666667 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0973236836923 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396493967046 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378917580473 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062734241085 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058641401056 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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