The following appeared in the Health section of the Greenhorne Gazette.
"Motilac is a substance that occurs naturally in the human digestive tract. Many consumers of dietary supplements containing motilac report significant easing of digestive discomfort after just a few weeks of use. Among Greenhorne residents, the consumption of motilac supplements has increased 80% over the last seven years. Last year, Greenhorne’s five hospitals reported fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders than any year on record. Meanwhile, sales of motilac supplements are declining in the neighboring town of Etolin. Notably, hospitals in Etolin report a steady increase in the last two years in patients experiencing a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms. The clear explanation of these trends is that motilac is effective in preventing many serious gastrointestinal disorders."
The argument presents the correlation with the use of dietary supplements containing motilac and easing of digestive discomfort. This claim is upported by examples of two cities Greenhorne and its neighbouring city Etolin. In greenhouse, consumption of motilac has increased by 80% and it is observed the hospitals of the area reporting fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders than any year on record. In Etolin however saled of motilac supplements are declining and apparently the patients experiencing a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms increased in the last two years. However, the prediction of ther direct relation is contignent upon several questions that must be answered to properly evaluate the validity of the argument.
The ambiguity of the argument lies in the very first line, if motilac is a substance produced within the body, why is there a need to take extra supplement. There are millions of substances which are produced in the body every day and unless and untill the body is unable to produce a certain subtance humans dont take supplements for them. If any data or experiment which could reflect on why is it necessary to take supplement for motilac is provided it would strengthen the argument.
In furtherance, why is there a decline in the sales of motilac's supplements in Etolin. There's no mention fo the reason behind the same. Long term side effects could be one of the reason for the decline in consumption. Hence if some shade is thrown on the reason behind the decline in sales and a research article proving no side effects of the supplements could assure the public in taking supplements.
Additionally, it is assumend that decline in sales implies decline in the consumption. There's a possibility of public have stocked the supplements or inclines to organic supplements. There's no information on the production of the supplements as higher production lead to lesser sale percentage.
These queries needs to be addressed in the argument.
Finally, it is claimed that fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders is found where motilac is consumend more and in places where consumption is reduced increasing cases of a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms is reported. However if the argument could socument a laboratory report which proves the deficiency of motilac in these patients could guarantee the direct relationship between the use of motilac and reduction in gastrointestinal symptoms.
In conclusion, despite the trends of consumption of motilac and reducing cases of gastrointestinal symptoms are directly proportional, the prediction based on the trends given is rife with unwarranted assumptions and open to questions stated above that must be answered satisfactorily to prove the plausibility of such presentments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2339 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.292 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.206 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.295 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 742, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...swered to properly evaluate the validity of the argument. The ambiguity of the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...he argument lies in the very first line, if motilac is a substance produced withi...
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...le to produce a certain subtance humans dont take supplements for them. If any data ...
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Suggestion: There's
...les of motilacs supplements in Etolin. Theres no mention fo the reason behind the sam...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... reason for the decline in consumption. Hence if some shade is thrown on the reason b...
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...les implies decline in the consumption. Theres a possibility of public have stocked th...
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Suggestion: There's
...nts or inclines to organic supplements. Theres no information on the production of the...
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Line 10, column 250, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... gastrointestinal symptoms is reported. However if the argument could socument a labora...
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Line 10, column 466, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...otilac and reduction in gastrointestinal symptoms. In conclusion, despite the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...c and reducing cases of gastrointestinal symptoms are directly proportional, the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40271493213 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26864436019 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477375565611 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8407366725 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.684210526 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178356388971 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584959097605 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737338455996 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0725303667675 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593876804742 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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