The following appeared in a letter to the city council of Canbury from the president of Plexma Motors.
"I am pleased that the council is considering Plexma’s plans to open a new manufacturing site in Canbury next year. In addition to our regular line of cars, Plexma has also begun designing and testing a line of automated self-driving vehicles. In a recent survey conducted by local media, 60 percent of Canbury’s residents reported that they would purchase a Plexma self-driving vehicle in the future if they were confident in the vehicles’ safety. We are happy to report that last summer, we tested our new line of self-driving vehicles in downtown Canbury with great success. Not only did our five tested vehicles remain accident-free for two months during testing, but in a survey conducted after testing, 90 percent of Canbury’s residents reported that when they were downtown and our vehicles were in operation they felt very safe. Because steady demand for our self-driving vehicles will create new jobs and thereby greatly benefit Canbury’s economy as a whole, I recommend that you vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing and selling these vehicles in Canbury."
The letter received by the city council of Canbury from the president of Plexma Motors presents a list of arguments which claims how if permission for manufacturing and selling vehicles is permitted in Canbury, Canbury's economy will be benefitted. However the prediction si contignent upon several questions that must be answered to properly evaluate the validity of the argument.
First, the letters claims that Plexma has begun designing and testing automated self - driving cars, but there's no sign of the electric cars being in the production or manufacturing stage. A tentative date of the release of electronic vehicles should be provided to ensure that the proposal is closer to implementation stage rather than research and development stage. This is important as there might be a case where the companies exploit the resources of a place without delivering any benefits to the locals. Hence, it is recommended to attest a detailed report of production and testing of electric vehicles to prevent complications in the future.
In furtherance, the letter presents that according to a survey conducted 60 percent of Canbury's residents reported to purchase Plexma's self driving car in future if they're confident with repect to safety grounds. And after testing the survey increases by 90 percent od the residents. However there's no information about audience on which the survey was conducted. For a survey results to be justified it is essential for survey to include people from all sections. The results of a survey which collected data only from the one particular section of the society would not be helpful in the decision making process for the council as a decision passed on this survey result would be unfair for other sectors.
Additionally, considering there's a steady demand of the vehicle once set up it is also claimed that it will create new job opportunities however no guarantee is given on the same. There are many MNC's which hire people from other parts of the world for cheaper labour which might later on move to city hence in turn creating a dearth of job opportunities for the residents of Canbury. Hence, if there was some agreement made such as if permission is granted, some percent of the job opportinities would be reserved for the locals will ensure the greater benefit for Canbury's economy.
Finally, the complete letter doesn't mention a word about Plexma's market value or competition from other automobile companies. It is essential to include that because it provides council a clearer idea of of the the requirement of Plexma's unit in the city.
In conclusion, despite the survey results claim that 90 percent of residents are willing to buy vehicals from Plexma, the prediction based on the assumption given is rife with unwarranted assumption and open to the questions stated above that must be answered satisfactorily to prove the plausibility of such presentments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 477 350
No. of Characters: 2409 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.673 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.05 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.839 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.298 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...y, Canburys economy will be benefitted. However the prediction si contignent upon sever...
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Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ting automated self - driving cars, but theres no sign of the electric cars being in t...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...e Plexmas self driving car in future if theyre confident with repect to safety grounds...
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Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...creases by 90 percent od the residents. However theres no information about audience on...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...by 90 percent od the residents. However theres no information about audience on which ...
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Suggestion: there's
...r sectors. Additionally, considering theres a steady demand of the vehicle once set...
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Line 8, column 30, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... economy. Finally, the complete letter doesnt mention a word about Plexmas market val...
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Line 8, column 201, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...ause it provides council a clearer idea of of the the requirement of Plexmas unit in ...
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Line 8, column 207, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...t provides council a clearer idea of of the the requirement of Plexmas unit in the city...
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Line 8, column 207, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...t provides council a clearer idea of of the the requirement of Plexmas unit in the city...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 475.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14736842105 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87935247582 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511578947368 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4382788615 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.823529412 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9411764706 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178282408329 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572671955713 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731823781469 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103411522547 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624138046326 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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