Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
The radio station WCQP in Rockville had decided to increase the call in advice programs 2 years ago and this increased the share of radio audience listening in the area. It is recommended by the station manager of KICK in Medway to include more call-in advice programs to gain larger audience share in the listening area. However the prediction is contigent upon several questions that must be answered to properly evaluate the validity of the argument.
First, it is stated that Radio station WCQP decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs however there is no mention of the reason for the same. Every decision taken by any organisation is infuenced by surveys or the shift in the target audience and various other reasons as this may effect the validity of the argument. For instance, varition in the target audience might have lead them to take the decision but this leads to a question if the target audience today remains the same as this decision was taken 2 years aho according to the needs and demands of the audience at that particular time. Hence it would strengthen the argument if the actions are justified.
In furtherance, essay mentions that the share has increased significantly however no data has been provided to aver it veraciously. Additionally, the equation explaining the trend of the increase in the share is lacking. There is a possibility of a sudden increase becuase of the curiosity developed among the audience for new podcast however the curiosity might have declined over the time of 2 years. The term "significan increase" gives us the average number but not the trend which would be utilised to extrapolate the equation in future, since KICK currently has to consider the future deman of these advice programs. Furthermore, the shares is indeed a good representation to define the overall scenario but it is also important to mention the variation in the total audience because shared could be deceptive in case of a anamolous total audience in the period.
Finally, a nationwide survey has been mentioned as another reason for recommendation by the station manager of KICK however no details has been mentioned regarding the same. Citing the survey is necessary however it is equally important to deliniate the abstract as the current survey plays an important role in the decision. The first reason is superficial but not substancial because the decision was taken 2 years ago and considering the advances in the technology it is important to evaluate the current scenario which would give KICK a profound idea than a decision taken by a radio station 2 years ago. Hence stating a compendium of the survey cited would justify the recommendation.
In conclusion, despite the WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs by citing a nationwide survey, the recommendation given is rife with unwarranted assumptions and open to the questions stated above that must be answered satisfactorily to prove the plausibility of such presentments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 19 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 505 350
No. of Characters: 2538 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.74 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.026 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.828 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.69 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...r audience share in the listening area. However the prediction is contigent upon severa...
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Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...e and various other reasons as this may effect the validity of the argument. For insta...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 613, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...f the audience at that particular time. Hence it would strengthen the argument if the...
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Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ut not the trend which would be utilised to extrapolate the equation in future, s...
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Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e utilised to extrapolate the equation in future, since KICK currently has to consider t...
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Line 5, column 839, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...se shared could be deceptive in case of a anamolous total audience in the period....
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Line 7, column 610, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...n taken by a radio station 2 years ago. Hence stating a compendium of the survey cite...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 505.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13663366337 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94162664805 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449504950495 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 842.4 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.9024765187 57.8364921388 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.588235294 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7058823529 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351916473344 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115511571042 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161171269204 0.0701772020484 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200787890182 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14355237902 0.0628817314937 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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