The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette On Balmer Island where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation the population increases to 100 000 during the summer months To reduce the number of accidents involving

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The statement above links increased number of moped rentals to road accidents, it suggests that reducing the number of moped rentals results in reduction of accidents by 50 percent. This statement is backed up by mentioning that, similar strategy was used in the town of Seaville and it experienced reduced number of accidents. Initially the suggestion seems plausible, however there is not enough substantial evidence and the letter misses out some crucial information. Without further looking into the evidence and unstated assumptions it cannot be inferred that, reducing the number of moped rentals lead to curtailing of accidents.

The letter just mentions that, accident involves only pedestrian and moped but numerical data about accidents and reason for accidents is missing. Sometimes, defiant, apathetic riders and indifferent pedestrians are also responsible for many accidents. If, riders remain unaware of road etiquette, there is no use in limiting the number of moped rentals. There should be detailed report on accidents, containing information about reason for accident, place of accident and other influencing factors. Just because moped are popular means of transport, it does not mean that there are no other type of vehicles in Balmer Island. The letter does not mention about accidents that are caused by huge vehicles like trucks or tankers involving mopeds and pedestrians. So it is important to shed some light on accidents caused by other types of vehicles involving pedestrians and mopeds. If, the collected data implies that, more number of pedestrian injured and moped are damaged by huge vehicles, the prediction by letter will turn out to be completely wrong.

The unstated assumption that reducing the number of moped rentals immediately lowers the accidents by half may not be true at all. Let’s say a moped renting company has 20 mopeds to rent and all 20 of them are having some kind of problem, which may lead to accident on road. If, the company reduces the number of moped rentals to 10, still all of them are problematic and each of them has the chance of failure on road. There must be some solid proof to back up the unstated assumption about 50 percent reduction in accidents.

Traffic rules and road conditions play very important role in safer travel experience. Bad roads with too much of pot holes, lack of zebra crossing, and blind curves also result in road mishaps. It is essential to examine about road conditions and traffic rules in the Balmer Island. Even if, the moped rental numbers are limited, accidents may still happen because of bad roads. So before imposing restrictions on moped rentals in Balmer island, it is very important to analyze the similarity between the town of Seaville and Balmer island. If both towns are very different in terms of road conditions, traffic rules and other factors that influence accidents, the prediction as stated by the letter will be wrong.

Due to aforementioned reasons, it is not agreeable that decreasing the number of vehicle rentals will also subside the number of road accidents involving mopeds. So before setting a limit on moped rentals, town council should do a rigorous research.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 230, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'rigorous research'.
Suggestion: rigorous research
...n moped rentals, town council should do a rigorous research.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2683.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 520.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15961538462 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68789129531 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465384615385 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9129140216 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.791666667 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.20833333333 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 6.88822355289 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232788303308 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735592559852 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603596722598 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131281646326 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351409484704 0.0628817314937 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 520 350
No. of Characters: 2612 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.775 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.023 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.612 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.055 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5