The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The prompt supports the idea of the author - to maintain a regulate retail price of the milk and make certain regulations in order to inhibit the excessive profits of the customer. Although the author is quite sound in his reasoning, there are certain logical flaws in the premises; underlie the argument. Those assumptions are here to be mentioned followed by sufficient clarifications.
To begin with - the author conjectured that - as there is growth of firms in the country so will be the number in cows, resulting availablity in milk. But has it specially mentioned anywhere in the passage that all the farmers in those firms are actually firming cows or other dairy animals? What if many of they are not interested enough in firming woth cows and they are dealing on hens or other domestic birds? What if many of those customers are not capable of buying new dairy animals or firms but are lending some others'? How can we ignore the possibility of not having sufficient number of dairy animals - needed to gain profits from a standard firm? The answers of these questions are vogue and clearly are out of evidences. If many farmers are not interested in firming with dairy animals because of price hike, then no matter how much firms are built or patronized, farmers will not be able to run those properly, let alone making profits from there.
The author apparently conjectured that - all the farmers have their own firms. He in no times disregards the possibility of an owner, having multiple of firms in his names. If that is the case - then how can a farmer gain excessive profits from those firms, providing that they (farmers) have taken those land in lease. It is niggardly possible that the owner of the firm will allow the farmer to go away with any thing more than his earned. Another perspective of the prompt, that the author is not critical of that - is no there any poissibility that the Local Food Market is profiting excessively in the guise of the increment of the firms? For rexample - if the farmers are providing the retailers with same amount or more amount of milk. But the Food Market is taking advantage of it by increasing the price of the milk and victiming the farmer. They might do this introspectly from the view that - the customers will hardly go for inquiry to the simple farmers and compare the price. Also that milk is kind of everyday and daily routine item for almost every one of us; salubrious enough to compel the people to buy. If the problem relies in the Food bank, then the idea of the author might not hold firmness.
Lastly but not leastly, the author suggestion to formulate certain regulation regarding the retail prices of the farmers might be susceptible to the authenticity of both the farmers and the Food Market officials. Such can be the case that the retail price is within the limit however, the wholesome price is not - as the scenario is previously mentioned. In that case - regulation only for the retail price will not do the work. Even if it is assumed that - enough regulations have been proposed, but what is the possibility that all the farmers will maintain those; providing that they are to blame for the price hike in milk. It might not sound convincing that proper regulations will be maintained althrough the increased firms to curb the retail price under control. Yet it can be possible if supports from the very initial level are gained - of which no evidences have been mentioned in the prompt.
So, looking at the factors and points aforementioned it can safely be concluded that - without answering the asked questions and providing necessary information about the farmers, owenrs and the Food Bank officials, it might be hard to come to any certain conclusion; devoid of enough critical reasoning.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 650 350
No. of Characters: 3048 1500
No. of Different Words: 270 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.049 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.689 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.501 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.074 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.366 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.593 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.461 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ts the idea of the author - to maintain a regulate retail price of the milk and make certa...
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Line 3, column 841, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...cause of price hike, then no matter how much firms are built or patronized, farmers ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...m will allow the farmer to go away with any thing more than his earned. Another perspecti...
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Line 5, column 989, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e simple farmers and compare the price. Also that milk is kind of everyday and daily...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1015, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...re the price. Also that milk is kind of everyday and daily routine item for almost every...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, however, if, lastly, look, regarding, so, then, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.6327345309 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3124.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 650.0 441.139720559 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80615384615 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04926703274 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58945767366 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 204.123752495 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430769230769 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 982.8 705.55239521 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3186920884 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.703703704 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0740740741 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37037037037 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0302885631795 0.218282227539 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0108925414689 0.0743258471296 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0155612871997 0.0701772020484 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0162126592422 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016278863731 0.0628817314937 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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