The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The editor of a batavia newspaper argues that batavia government should start to regulate retail milk prices to ensure fair prices for consumers. To support his/her argument, the author cites the following evidences: first, the number of dairy farms is greater than it was ten years ago; second, the price of milk increased. Tough the issue might has its merit, due to lack of persuasive evidences and unaddressed assumptions, the conclusion is unsubstantiated and flawed.
To begin with, the author unfairly assumes that the cost of milk production remains stable. The assumption may seem valid at first glance, further examination curtails its credibility. even if the total quantity of milk selling increases, the farmers perhaps do not make much profit. Owing to economic development, there was an inflation over batavia. The total costs of milk production can be increasing dramatically. Technologies, hourly wage for employees, taxes and many other factors would enhance a lot. After deducting all the inputs in producing milk, the profit made by farmers probably not a large amount. The excessive profit mentioned in the letter is unwarranted.
Moreover, the price of milk at local excello food market does not necessarily provide a full picture of the milk price at the entire region. if the local excello food market is the cheapest place for citizens to buy milk, then we may assume that the milk price will be much higher in other stores, substantiating the feasibility of government regulation. if, on the other hand, excello food market mainly provides organic foods and its target consumers are those from relative wealth families, then excello is not representative of the milk price of batavia to most consumers. it is, hence, unfair for the government to regulate the milk price. we are unable to draw the conclusion about the necessity of government regulation without the detailed information of milk price from all markets in batavia.
Last but not least, the author fails to consider the facts that most family attained higher income over the past ten years. even though the milk price increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon, most individuals can still afford it. The new price is considered as fair to most people. The author, in addition, fails to consider the effectiveness of government intervention. The farmers would come up with many ways to earn profit under government regulation, even inducing severer impacts. Say, for example, farms can add more water to milk in the production which can decrease the overall quality of the milk. Or alternatively, they use some medicine or spur to make the life cycle of cows shorter to have greater output, and medicines can negatively affect citizens. The regulation cannot be readily implemented without considering all the disadvantages incurred.
To sum up, as it stands, the argument by the editor is based on several questionable assumptions that weaken its validity. In order to further strengthen the conclusion, the author is recommended to provide the evidences as follows: first, the milk prices from all the local stores in batavia are increasing largely; second, check whether the cost of milk production has increases fairly and whether the price is fair to consumers; finally, the income and GDP of the area is not increased a lot, thus preventing them to afford the milk at current price.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 551 350
No. of Characters: 2756 1500
No. of Different Words: 267 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.845 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.002 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.705 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.907 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...r examination curtails its credibility. even if the total quantity of milk selling i...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tioned in the letter is unwarranted. Moreover, the price of milk at local exc...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...of the milk price at the entire region. if the local excello food market is the ch...
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Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...e feasibility of government regulation. if, on the other hand, excello food market...
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Line 7, column 578, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ilk price of batavia to most consumers. it is, hence, unfair for the government to...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... government to regulate the milk price. we are unable to draw the conclusion about...
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Line 9, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
... higher income over the past ten years. even though the milk price increased from .5...
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Line 9, column 374, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...fectiveness of government intervention. The farmers would come up with many ways to...
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Line 9, column 611, Rule ID: OR_ALTERNATIVELY[1]
Message: Use simply 'Or'.
Suggestion: Or
...crease the overall quality of the milk. Or alternatively, they use some medicine or spur to make...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, then, thus, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2844.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 550.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17090909091 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80602421601 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 204.123752495 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523636363636 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 885.6 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 21.0 8.76447105788 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.1042764419 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.384615385 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65384615385 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0760100303485 0.218282227539 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243251424444 0.0743258471296 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470006924722 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0593294300511 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652366645257 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 98.500998004 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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