The decrease in shoppers and a corresponding increase in the popularity of skateboarding has motivated the writting of this letter by a Central Plaza store owner in a bid to save his/her business. The recommendation in this letter to the editor from the store owner seems logical, however, the recommendation is drawn from questionable and debatable reasonings which needs to be addressed before the implementation of this recommendation.
The store owner attributed the decrease in shoppers to an increase in the number of skateboard users. However, no metrics were given as to how this relationship was determined. The store owner needs to provide answers to the source of his data for this inverse relationship between shoppers and skateboarders. Furthermore, the plaza owner should shed more light on the overall performance of plazas in the area as well as stores in the plaza. Is the drop in the number of shoppers ubiquitous or limited to the store owner or Central Plaza? Perhaps, the store owner should consider the current economic status of Central Plaza's location to provide answers on the performance of the stores.
The letter subtly linked the dramatic increased in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza to skateboard users. However, there is no evidence to support this claim. More so, the letter failed to mention or provide evidence for availability of waste bins or security measures in the plaza. The overall security situation in the area also needs to be considered. Is the vandalism across the region or just localised to the plaza? Are there enough waste bins and waste disposal measure in the plaza? Answers to this question will really provide a disinterested evaluation of the recommendation. The store owners should review the CCTV footage of the plaza and provide answers as regards the perpetrators of these vices.
The store owner also needs to provide answers for the nature of goods and services offered by the stores in Central Plaza. Do this goods and services have any relationship with skateboard users? Are skateboard users enjoying the facilities at Central Palaza while patronising other stores or plazas. Answers to this question will help the store owner decide if it is right to prohibit skateboarding or consider goods and services needed by skateboarders.
Until Answers to this questions are satisfactorily provided, the recommendation might not achieve the predicted result. Hence the store owners needs to let go of his preconceived notions and bring answers to this question to fortify his reasonings and recommendation.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2138 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.127 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.962 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.846 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.335 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...implementation of this recommendation. The store owner attributed the decrease in ...
^^^
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ered by the stores in Central Plaza. Do this goods and services have any relationshi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 18, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ded by skateboarders. Until Answers to this questions are satisfactorily provided, ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...might not achieve the predicted result. Hence the store owners needs to let go of his...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, so, well, while, as regards, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23076923077 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03005165265 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425480769231 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8009207798 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9090909091 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335844824624 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115200826146 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107124359933 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200340530869 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105957096586 0.0628817314937 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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