The following appeared as a letter to the editor of National Issues magazine in the country of Ganadia.
Last month, National Issues ran an article about the decline—as measured by shrinking populations and the flight of young people—of small towns in Ganadia. Here in Lemmontown, a small resort town on the ocean, we are seeing just the opposite: citizens from the neighboring towns of Armontown and Gurdy City are moving here at a record rate. Furthermore, greater than ever numbers of high school graduates in Lemmontown are choosing to stay in Lemmontown, as the building of new hotels has created a significant number of jobs. All along the eastern seaboard are similar stories. Small towns in Ganadia are not in decline.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
If any magazine stating something to some countries ( i.e Ganadia ) is not understandable and on what basis of unclear data and to counterstrike this statement writers also not holding any proof of valid resons , there are many flaws in the statement above which stated nebulous and which has to be lucid.
Firstly , Both Magazine and writer stating small town but which small towns are there is unstated - because in a country there can be N number of towns or places but for which towns writer and mazagine are making the arguement is vague , writer should first analyse the data and the structure of that data on what basis magazine came up with this statement and then argue because if it is wrong then its a countryman first duty to make it valid statment or bring some proof to make that magazine rewrite that statement.
Secondly, quntification of data is missing Lemmon town us saying that due to hotels building many people are choosing to visit lemon town and wanted to staty here because of the jobs but some may ask writer that - Hotels are giving jobs ? and for all ? - that doesn’t hold the water in the argument because where is the data or quant that states this is valide information
Thirdly , Eastern seaboard are same as western ? - writer must not deny that one issue or a town is not same as another town - or one benefit of a town not really mean that same with another town
here some data mis matches and doubt take a revive to curious about the fact and figures
Conclusion : Everyone respects that if you want to say something which is bad or you feel something bad then it is right but those same peopl also demand some valid information from your side to proof the other party wrong - Here in this statement there were many flows like 1) Which small towns ? 2) Where is the data ? 3) Hotels give jobs to all ? 4) Eastern = Western ? So this few question are are stated unclear with no proof in hand and the conlcude statement of writer is nebulous statement “ small towns in ganadia are not in decline “ which is not lucid in nature - so in general , write must come up with the fact and figure to make writer cristal clear on the ground.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 17 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1716 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.411 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.207 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 37.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.466 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...zine stating something to some countries i.e Ganadia is not understandable and o...
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Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...something to some countries i.e Ganadia is not understandable and on what basis ...
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Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...so not holding any proof of valid resons , there are many flaws in the statement a...
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Line 2, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lous and which has to be lucid. Firstly , Both Magazine and writer stating small ...
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Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...zagine are making the arguement is vague , writer should first analyse the data an...
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Line 2, column 401, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... then argue because if it is wrong then its a countryman first duty to make it vali...
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Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...wanted to staty here because of the jobs but some may ask writer that - Hotels ar...
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Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
... writer that - Hotels are giving jobs ? and for all ? - that doesn’t hold the water...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ates this is valide information Thirdly , Eastern seaboard are same as western ? ...
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Line 6, column 43, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...re some data mis matches and doubt take a revive to curious about the fact and figures ...
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Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: are
...astern = Western ? So this few question are are stated unclear with no proof in hand an...
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Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
...atement of writer is nebulous statement “ small towns in ganadia are not in decli...
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Line 7, column 539, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
...all towns in ganadia are not in decline “ which is not lucid in nature - so in ge...
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Line 7, column 585, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...h is not lucid in nature - so in general , write must come up with the fact and fi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53213367609 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28833136591 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470437017995 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 190.967039041 57.8364921388 330% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.3 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.9 23.324526521 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.70786347227 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111970651439 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347451167059 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385423253038 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609136097586 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267911646336 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 48.3550499002 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.59 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 12.3882235529 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 26.0 11.9071856287 218% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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