The following appeared in a health newsletter.
"A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, however, suggests that during the same ten-year period, the number of bicycle-related accidents has increased 200 percent. These results demonstrate that bicyclists feel safer because they are wearing helmets, and they take more risks as a result. Thus, to reduce the number of serious injuries from bicycle accidents, the government should concentrate more on educating people about bicycle safety and less on encouraging or requiring bicyclists to wear helmets."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The conclusion of the newsletter which explicitley explain us that how important is the wear a helmet in the road, In ten years many risk there life and still do, 200 percent os increasing accident, this all turn this above statment to the nebulous zone where the pivot is implicit and having few flow listed below
First, Health Newsletter suggest that during ten years 200 percent increase in the bycycle realted accident, this statement is equivocla because of percentage quantification that is - if 2 accident were there and now the accedent are 4 the the ration will be 200% but this quantification of hte numbers are missing from the newsletter, and If such a big ratio is there and if it is still inreasing then it is far more dangerous for the people whio are living in the country and government should think on that first - this has to be mentioned in the newsletter with exact numbers.
Second, Government should take a place an action to make the safety of the people by training them in the cycle rule and wear the helmet will be the cumplusoty event - as suggest, but this statement is final verdict by the newsletter though there is possibilites of the starting a new lane for the bycycle riders due to this continuous road accident to prevent the precious life of the countrymen, Government has the right to make any ammendments but it should be not biased and it has be done via certain researched which is lacking in the above statement.
Third, One should ask that why they are taking more risk although the helmet is safer on road but still there are N Number of chances that accidnet may occurs, health newsletter conclusion on as a result is dubious because of the unclear finalization of result to taking a risk and - how many taking the risk - why they are taking the risk, is there any problem that they have to go through tat road or there is no other way to go from home to work station, all this important point is has to be covered int he above newsletter.
Ofcourse, Wearing a helmet while driving either a Bycycle or motercycle is necessory to prevent the future event which may harm us, however we have to look on the other factor such as extra lane for bycylclist, making a special bus for the people who are taking a risk to ride on road due to some survival reason- this some pivot is important understand by the government to place a final statement in favour of the people life’s.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 24 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 1948 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.488 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.505 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 54.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 36.276 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.423 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun risk seems to be countable; consider using: 'many risks'.
Suggestion: many risks
...wear a helmet in the road, In ten years many risk there life and still do, 200 percent os...
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Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...t were there and now the accedent are 4 the the ration will be 200% but this quantifica...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...t were there and now the accedent are 4 the the ration will be 200% but this quantifica...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere there and now the accedent are 4 the the ration will be 200% but this quantif...
^^
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ers are missing from the newsletter, and If such a big ratio is there and if it i...
^^
Line 4, column 487, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... but it should be not biased and it has be done via certain researched which is la...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, third, while, as to, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57834101382 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57451363243 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47465437788 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 108.0 22.8473053892 473% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.907285039 57.8364921388 306% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 496.75 119.503703932 416% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 108.5 23.324526521 465% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.5 5.70786347227 447% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142142555927 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843526576753 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506855797021 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880905191189 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472440230156 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 54.4 14.3799401198 378% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.22 48.3550499002 -44% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 43.0 12.197005988 353% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.47 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.87 8.32208582834 143% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 12.3882235529 436% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 45.2 11.1389221557 406% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 54.0 11.9071856287 454% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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