The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the passage, the writer argues that the real estate firm, Adam Realty, is the superior firm in his/her town and advise his/her friend to prefer this firm whether he/she wants to sell the real estate quickly. This is based on the premises that Adams Realty has more argents than Fitch Realty, it presented twice revenues in comparison with Fitch Realty and with the assistance of Adam Realty, the author succeed to sell faster his/her own home. However, on deeper analysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been take into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the correlation of the number of the employees with the superiority of the firm. It is possible that Fitch Realty needs lower agents than Adams Realty due to the fact that its employees have a high-level education and are very skilled. In order to strengthen the argument, the author should cite a list of the average level education of the employees in each company and additionally their working experiences and skills.
Moreover, the writer’s argument is incorrectly based on the assumption that the twice revenue of Adam Realty in comparison with the Fitch Realty is a persuasive clue which demonstrates the superiority of Adam Realty. Maybe the Fitch Realty faced serious problems last year as health problems of the owner or destruction of the most crucial assets of the firm due to a natural phenomenon. To overcome this flaw, the argument should enhanced by presenting a research in local newspaper which compares the revenues of the two firms at least for a period of five years.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendation in the essay show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1508 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.849 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.616 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.159 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...istaken assumptions and logical flaws. One such flaw is the correlation of the ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... their working experiences and skills. Moreover, the writer’s argument is incor...
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Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
... argument should enhanced by presenting a research in local newspaper which compares the r...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s at least for a period of five years. After closer examination of the passage ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, may, moreover, so, then, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0325732899 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68909425598 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5357456536 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.454545455 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9090909091 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33439666373 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107426737516 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10467985867 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171939340714 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108825710537 0.0628817314937 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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