The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the passage, the writer argues that the town council of Balmer Island should limit the permittable rents of mopeds everyday during the summer season from 50 to 25 per day. This is based on the premise that the same measure was adopted by the neigboring island of Seaville and led to a decrease in moped accidents. However, on deeper analysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the assumption that the succesfull measure of declining the permittable rents per day which is implemented in Seaville Island will have the corrrespond sucess on Balmer Island leading to the decrease of moped accidents. The writer corresponds the two islands, yet he/she does not mention more specific information for the Seaville Island. It is possible that the infrastructure of road network in Seaville Island is far better that its in Bolmer Island and thus the measure lead to the wellcome result, In order to strengthen his/her argument, the writer should cite more data about the conditions of roads by comparing the current infrastructure between the two islands.
Moreoever, the writer's argument is based on the mistaken assumption that the number of tourists in the two island are almost equal. Though the writer does not mention any clue about the number of visitors in Seaville Island, which may be much lesser than the number of visitors in Balmer Islands. Also, the writer make a reference to the increase of the population in Bolmer Islands, yet he/she does not mention the permanent population to depict the grade of the increasement of population during the summer season. It is possible that the permanrnt population and and the tourists in Seaville Island to be much lesser and thus the measure of decline the available rents to lead in fewer mopeds accidents.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparents that there are several logical flaws. The recommnedations in the essay show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1732 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.678 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the passage, the writer argues that t...
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Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...d limit the permittable rents of mopeds everyday during the summer season from 50 to 25 ...
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Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ittable rents of mopeds everyday during the summer season from 50 to 25 per day. This is based on...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...tween the two islands. Moreoever, the writers argument is based on the mistaken assum...
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Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...f the increasement of population during the summer season. It is possible that the permanrnt popu...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
... possible that the permanrnt population and and the tourists in Seaville Island to be m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07471264368 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75799202607 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462643678161 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.542652113 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.166666667 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209519298759 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811890004422 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540886170707 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123376776539 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076836712827 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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