People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Who are really rule our world was always a controversial issue and in nowadays with the globalization and the great social interaction, this issue has been made more intrigue. A great majority of people support that our destiny is determined by upper forces who determine the ruling class and navigate our choices and future. On the contrary, other assert that in our era people enjoy the privileges of the real democracy and everyone is free to make his/her choices. It is my personal belief that the frame of our choices unfortunately is limited by invisible forces who set the rules.
Of course, people in our modern society have the pleasure to take advantage of choices and decisions, that our ancestors did not enjoy. The majority of the governments are elected and so their implemented programs and legislations are the result of the choices of people. However prominent personalities gave enormous fights and races to establish some social behavior and human right that modern people have. For instance, Martin Luther King, is a person who really contradicted with the established forced behavior of discrimination of colored people in USA and is a representative example of the theory that people can really make their own making how to interact social independently the established norm.
On the other hand, it would be naïve for someone to ignore that the current globalization and thus greater social interaction is a field that invisible forces can really determine our behavior. The ruling class has all the means like power and money to dominate in a such vast and antagonistic environment. These forces have the power to influence governments and to impair unprofitable legislations. For instance, it is widely known the influence of specific clubs of people who belong in ruling class like the Masons
To conclude up, people in nowadays have more free space to determine their behavior and choices, however this behavior is limited in a specific frame which promotes the purposes and desires of forces who rule the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, so, thus, for instance, of course, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 335.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10447761194 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84674408445 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49552238806 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.4269747171 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.5 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9166666667 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162454524185 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057347862365 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461487847459 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108436392088 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326183940078 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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