The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument stated in the passage is about the two leading real estate firms in the town of the author and author shows how one is superior to the other firm and tries to convince his friend that if he want to sell home quickly you should use services of the adams realty. but the evidences used by the author is unconvincing.
The author compares the number of the real estate agents both companies are having. adams realty is having 40 real estate agents where as the fitch realty is having 25 real estate agents whom many of them are part time. it is not necessary that the if agents are more from the side of the adams realty it means that agency is more successful in the market. if the fitch is having only 25 and many of them temporary that doesn't means they are not efficient in terms of getting work. if they are part timers then instead it is good as many people will be able to come in the contact of the agents as they are coming the varied sectors they can increase their business opportunities which will e not available to the agents of the admas realty.
Moreover author compares the revenue of the adams and fitch in the argument. it is not necessary that every year the revenue of the admas realty would be high as it is now. it might be the case that revenue for the fitch realty last year was not good because of the competitive market and decisions made by the management . it doesn't ensure that it would be also less in the coming years. it can also be the case that the admas realty have adopted the cost cutting measure and started taking less brokerage in greed of increasing the revenue but that doesn't ensure that customers is happy with the adams realty.
The author is comparing the two firms in very unrealistic way, he compares the speed of selling of two different homes in completely two different period of the time. it is not the way to compare the the efficiency and services of the two firms. A period of ten years is huge taste, choices, of the buyer and many parameters changes with time. As in period of the 10 years anything can change it might be that the period before 10 years there was no demand of the homes in that particular are and that was the starting of the realty firm. other case could be that the fitch realty firm can get you more better prices while selling and buying properties which the adams realty firm might not be giving.
So on the basis of the few unrealistic comparisons and the just mere basis of the number of the employees and firms revenue the firm can not be chosen. As it might be possibility that the friend of author who wants to sell the property in that area some other agency has dominance apart from this both. So it depends mainly on the area and type of the property, condition of the property which decides which real estate firm would be appropriate to sell that respective property. On the basis of the above statements it shows that the argument made by the author on the decision of the real estate firms are baseless and not convincing any way.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 566 350
No. of Characters: 2440 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.878 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.311 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.191 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.955 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.423 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.687 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.199 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...tries to convince his friend that if he want to sell home quickly you should use ser...
^^^^
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...hould use services of the adams realty. but the evidences used by the author is unc...
^^^
Line 4, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Adams
...state agents both companies are having. adams realty is having 40 real estate agents ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
... realty is having 40 real estate agents where as the fitch realty is having 25 real esta...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...eal estate agents whom many of them are part time. it is not necessary that the if agents...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...agents whom many of them are part time. it is not necessary that the if agents are...
^^
Line 4, column 358, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...gency is more successful in the market. if the fitch is having only 25 and many of...
^^
Line 4, column 421, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...only 25 and many of them temporary that doesnt means they are not efficient in terms o...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 483, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...not efficient in terms of getting work. if they are part timers then instead it is...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...to the agents of the admas realty. Moreover author compares the revenue of the adam...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...of the adams and fitch in the argument. it is not necessary that every year the re...
^^
Line 7, column 174, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...dmas realty would be high as it is now. it might be the case that revenue for the ...
^^
Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e case that revenue for the fitch realty last year was not good because of the co...
^^
Line 7, column 323, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ket and decisions made by the management . it doesnt ensure that it would be also ...
^^
Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... and decisions made by the management . it doesnt ensure that it would be also les...
^^
Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... and decisions made by the management . it doesnt ensure that it would be also les...
^^
Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...d decisions made by the management . it doesnt ensure that it would be also less in th...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...would be also less in the coming years. it can also be the case that the admas rea...
^^
Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...would be also less in the coming years. it can also be the case that the admas rea...
^^
Line 7, column 486, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted the cost cutting measure and started taking less brokerage in greed of increa...
^^
Line 7, column 554, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...reed of increasing the revenue but that doesnt ensure that customers is happy with the...
^^^^^^
Line 12, column 168, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...etely two different period of the time. it is not the way to compare the the effic...
^^
Line 12, column 197, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... the time. it is not the way to compare the the efficiency and services of the two firm...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 197, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... the time. it is not the way to compare the the efficiency and services of the two firm...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...two firms. A period of ten years is huge taste, choices, of the buyer and many p...
^^
Line 12, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...od of ten years is huge taste, choices, of the buyer and many parameters changes...
^^
Line 12, column 542, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Other
...at was the starting of the realty firm. other case could be that the fitch realty fir...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 601, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... that the fitch realty firm can get you more better prices while selling and buying propert...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rms revenue the firm can not be chosen. As it might be possibility that the friend...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, while, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2497.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 563.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4351687389 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22157035797 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.387211367673 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0879662461 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.904761905 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8095238095 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47619047619 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317415972071 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964545508415 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925428855104 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173010796522 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548202337649 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 12.5979740519 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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