The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter the received from the owner's by the manager of apartment at Sunnyside Tower, has an main problem regarding the low water pressure the showerhead's have after the instalment of new showerheads on the first five floors of the apartment tower. According to the argument the owners are not happy with the decision.
Firstly, the main question to address is, do people even take bath all day long, and even if all the shower heads are been replaced, it need to be observed how much liters of water is been actually consumed in the morning as it the prime time when majority of people take bath. We also need to keep in mind that, are showers heads only one outlet that will be used? There be can be different way for water outlet. It Can be taps, bathtubs, toilets, dishwasher and even washing machine. Don't they consume more or equivalent amount of water as compared to the showerheads?
Further, when the experiment was conducted for the period of one month on the first five floor, the water consumption reading before and after aren’t even available. So on what based the has the Sunnyside corporation even decided to take the action to replace the new showerhead on all 20 floor. It can be true that as the water supply was one thirds of the original water supply through the showerheads, the people leaving in the apartment might spend more time in the bathroom. If early it was 20 minutes for one person to take bath, as the water pressure is reduced he/she might spend 35minutes, which might result in the same water usage.
Moving forward with the argument, we can even observe that the cooperation what to save money to increase there profits. Aren't there any other ways to do so? Can't they reduce the electricity usage in apartment premises, where it is possible too. Instead of keeping the light on in the places where the sunrays reach in during the day time they can reduce the electricity bill and increase the profits. Clearly, there can even be other areas apart only from reducing the water pressure in all the apartments.
Finally concluding to the argument, it is been found that the plan to increase the profit by reducing the water pressure by one third can be revised in many terms possible. It can be clearly seen there are my more scope to save money and increase profit, as the number of complains regarding the low water supply might increase in the coming months. Also the data to compare the water usage is not even available which eventually weakens the argument. So I thing it is important to revise the plan to increase the profits.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4,0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 2072 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.504 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.341 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.362 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The letter the received from the owners ...
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Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...er of apartment at Sunnyside Tower, has an main problem regarding the low water pr...
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Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...owners are not happy with the decision. Firstly, the main question to address is...
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Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...en replaced, it need to be observed how much liters of water is been actually consum...
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Line 2, column 493, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Don't
...s, dishwasher and even washing machine. Dont they consume more or equivalent amount ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... water as compared to the showerheads? Further, when the experiment was conduct...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... after aren’t even available. So on what based the has the Sunnyside corporation ...
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Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one third', 'a third', or simply 'thirds'?
Suggestion: one third; a third; thirds
...an be true that as the water supply was one thirds of the original water supply through th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... might result in the same water usage. Moving forward with the argument, we can...
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Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Aren't
...o save money to increase there profits. Arent there any other ways to do so? Cant the...
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Line 4, column 164, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: Can't; Cannot
...s. Arent there any other ways to do so? Cant they reduce the electricity usage in a...
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Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther ways to do so? Cant they reduce the electricity usage in apartment premises,...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... water pressure in all the apartments. Finally concluding to the argument, it i...
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Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... pressure in all the apartments. Finally concluding to the argument, it is been ...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ly might increase in the coming months. Also the data to compare the water usage is ...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
...h eventually weakens the argument. So I thing it is important to revise the plan to i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, if, regarding, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66153846154 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40800901714 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47032967033 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0154544536 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.05 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222806414459 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657580620635 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841301009585 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145534288855 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117185218071 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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