The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager One month ago all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one t

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The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.

"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

The author presents a dubious claim modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase the profits. The author presents this claim on the basis of an one month old decision, when all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be, and assures that the change will result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation pay for water each month. Let us look at the various false assumptions made in presenting the claim.
First, the author believes that making alterations to the existing showerheads will increase profits. Showerheads are not the only source of water wastage. The entire water distribution system might have clogged due to rusting or other pipeline issues. Lack of flowing force in water across the pipeline can also lead to unchecked electric consumptions, hence increasing the water bills. For example, when the entire water distribution system is clogged due to excessive rusting, lack of steady flow of water through the pipeline would lead to increased pressure on the rotating motor, responsible for filling up the water storage system of the entire corporation.
Secondly, the author mentions that he/she has received some complaints regarding low water pressure. Low water pressure can be a result of lack of adequate groundwater level below the foundation of the entire Sunnyside complex. This will in turn, lead to increased duration of operations for the water motors. Consequentially, more electricity consumptions. To visualize, it generally takes sixty to seventy minutes for a 40kW water motor to fill up a water storage tank of two thousand liter capacity, in presence of a ten meter groundwater level. If the groundwater level is below that standard level, the same motor is bound to work for more than ninety minutes to fill up even half of the tank.
Third, the author's claim is based on unproven figures as actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available. There are no dead certainties that the figures will be in favor of the author. If the above-mentioned two points are taken into consideration during calculation of the water readings, then it can be assumed with quiet certainty that the figures will be higher on the negative side. Moreover, restriction of maximum water flow should not be imposed as this would interfere with the lifestyle of the flat owners. There can be situations, such as during a family get-togethers, when a particular flat consumes more than their usual water consumptions.
To conclude, the argument might have been strengthened if only the author had provided with enough evidences and proven case studies to show that modifications of showerheads will lead to increased profits for the complex.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19108280255 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87596526453 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505307855626 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.6272217492 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.25 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.55 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240990957091 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725588754042 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107560028022 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137883204055 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142786611917 0.0628817314937 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 472 350
No. of Characters: 2397 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.661 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.078 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.796 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.474 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.329 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5