The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The letter from owner to manager of Sunnyside Towers apartment complex narrates about its new modification scheme on showerheads carried out to restrict usage of water flow to one-third of what it used to be. The owner furthers tells about not receiving any complaint or feedback regarding this change, thus, applying this scheme on large scale seems to be feasible and may attract more profit in future. Though the owner is sighting this as an opportunity to raise profit, on contrast, it may also lead to huge losses due to unacceptable assumptions and reef predictions made by the author.
Along with the first few sentences, we can see the owner telling about how modification of showerheads can restrict maximum water flow to one-third of its current usage. Assuming that the saving of water is whole-and-sole dependent on showers of the buildings is really a vague consideration. Some alternative usage of water in buildings can be as follows - provision of drinking water, water available to maintain plantation around the towers, the water being used for some new construction purpose. It is also possible that other than shower the residents use the water for household purpose. Also, restricting water usage is totally dependent on period of usage. Thus, before clarification with respect to all such perspectives one cannot make any kind of conclusion.
Further, the author tells about very few number of complaints received, thus, that concludes into no problems faced regarding showers. This is really vague assumption of ignoring the possible scenario and making statement for acceptance of the modification. This can be possible that the people still are tolerating such behaviour of the authority and in future may complaint about this. Also, even it is possible that significant number of complaints are being misplaced. The author does not provides us with statistics regarding complaints to make any precise conclusion based on it, thus, making any firm statement based on letter does not seems to be possible at this stage.
Moreover, while concluding the letter the owner makes a reef predictions of more modification of showerheads, may grab more profit. Earlier the author mentions about the unavailability of readings of water usage before and after adjustments. Thus, the author is not in position to say whether the modification has enhanced the profit or given rise to losses. Also, an alternative suggestion for increasing profit is the author may consider saving electricity, efficient usage of fuel, using reversible sources of energy and many more rather than this. So, the author must think before making any illogical predictions.
Finally, we would conclude our arguments by suggesting the author to have a concise look into pros and cons of modification of the showerheads and based on thorough analysis, must make any kind of decision for futher modification.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2383 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.147 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.849 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.487 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.85 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.324 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 395, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...be feasible and may attract more profit in future. Though the owner is sighting this as a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
.... Further, the author tells about very few number of complaints received, thus, that conc...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provide'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: provide
...re being misplaced. The author does not provides us with statistics regarding complaints...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...re being misplaced. The author does not provides us with statistics regarding complaints...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seem'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: seem
...firm statement based on letter does not seems to be possible at this stage. Moreover...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...firm statement based on letter does not seems to be possible at this stage. Moreover...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, may, moreover, really, regarding, so, still, third, thus, while, kind of, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 463.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26133909287 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91357630289 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501079913607 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6511832689 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.8 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.15 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173851523726 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535980565331 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096377391321 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937813101874 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931590359176 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.