The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the letter, from the owner of Sunnyside Towers apartment complex, it is claimed that profit of the complex will significantly increase as the showerhead will be modified inorder to restrict the waterflow throughout twelve building in complex. The owner of apartment complex has claimed this statement in reference to the result obtained from change made in three building where maximum waterflow was possible to be restricted and being based on minimum complain made by the apartment residents about low water pressure. However, before this recommendation are made, these three evidence needs to be thoroughly evaluated.
First of all, the owner of the apartment complex has prematurely assumed that reduce in the flow of water to one third will increase the saving of the sunnyside corporation. In fact, the evidence are still not strong to help drawn into conclusion.The reading of the water usage before and after is not yet obtained.It is possible that the actual increase in expenses of the corporation in water is not due to the waterflow, rather, the leakage in the waterpipe and other extraneous factor might be responsible. Probably, the low water pressure will increase the cost of high electrical energy to pump on such height of building, resulting increase in cost of electricity bill. Thus, without proper reading and evaluation of the records of saving water unit, it is risky decision to adjust the showerhead of building.
Secondly, despite some complain being recorded, the owner has came to the conclusion that there is no problem in low water pressure. However, it is likely to be possible that those few complain can be representative from the resident of three building whose showeheads were modified one months ago. If it is true , then the conclusion which has been derived based on this assumption that there will be no problem in pressure change, will be misleading.In fact, without the proper survey in the present response of three building residents whose showerheads were changed, the evidence is still not strong enough to cite, inorder to jump into a conclusion. Therefore, the complaints if properly reviewed and adrressed then this evidence can be cited.
Furthermore, the evidence from the past month expenses is well needed. If the list of expenses that the corporation has made on waterline is derived then it can be used to evaluate whether there is extra expenses on water or not. However,it will be more rational, if the owner would wait and look at the difference of expenses from past few month to the coming few month on waterline. If the evidence are drawn that shows that there is significant difference in the cost and saving has been made then only it can be cited as a strong evidence. Otherwise, the sudden jump into conclusion without proper evaluation of expenses and saving will be irrational.
Thus, the argument, based on the current evidence, is seriously flawed. However, with proper record of response from resident in the three earlier changed shower head building and through analysis of cost and saving of few month around change, can be proved as a strong evidence, inorder to draw a conclusion. Otherwise, the cited evidence if taken for drawing conclusion, then the owner might cause a big loss to the corporation instead of profite as expected.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 550 350
No. of Characters: 2706 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.843 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.92 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.634 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 156 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 117 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.892 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 429, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... waterflow was possible to be restricted and being based on minimum complain mad...
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Line 1, column 449, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ble to be restricted and being based on minimum complain made by the apartment r...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ence needs to be thoroughly evaluated. First of all, the owner of the ...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ot strong to help drawn into conclusion.The reading of the water usage before and a...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ge before and after is not yet obtained.It is possible that the actual increase in...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o adjust the showerhead of building. Secondly, despite some complain being re...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
... complain being recorded, the owner has came to the conclusion that there is no prob...
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Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one month', 'a month', or simply 'months'?
Suggestion: one month; a month; months
...building whose showeheads were modified one months ago. If it is true , then the conclusio...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e modified one months ago. If it is true , then the conclusion which has been deri...
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Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... in pressure change, will be misleading.In fact, without the proper survey in the ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...essed then this evidence can be cited. Furthermore, the evidence from the past ...
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Line 6, column 197, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are extra expenses'?
Suggestion: there are extra expenses
...then it can be used to evaluate whether there is extra expenses on water or not. However,it will be mor...
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Line 6, column 245, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... extra expenses on water or not. However,it will be more rational, if the owner wou...
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Line 6, column 345, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun month seems to be countable; consider using: 'few months'.
Suggestion: few months
...at the difference of expenses from past few month to the coming few month on waterline. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thus, well, in fact, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 55.5748502994 160% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2775.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 546.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08241758242 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77253577139 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419413919414 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 874.8 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7506501854 57.8364921388 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.052631579 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7368421053 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251721279488 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814091450276 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104431527319 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141748962826 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912016587384 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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