The following appeared in a memo from the Board of Directors of Butler Manufacturing.
"During the past year, workers at Butler Manufacturing reported 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. A recent government study reports that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents. Therefore, we recommend that Butler Manufacturing shorten each of its work shifts by one hour. Shorter shifts will allow Butler to improve its safety record by ensuring that its employees are adequately rested."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Since, argument posit by vice president of butle manufacturing that it should reduce the working hour shift by 1 hour inorder to reduce the job related accident as similar strategy employped by panoply. However, argument is undergrids by serval untenable and wanting assumption, informaation like percentage doesn't give accurate number of accident case, fatigue and sleep cause desideratum more exegesis, and what about company own safety evaluation?.
Moreover, percentage doesn't refelect accurate number that is 30 percent more accident than nearby panpoly company, it not only vague but also ambiguous testimony. As it we are not able to to know apt number of job accident case. In particular, if job accident case in panoply is 30, than in butler is 39, which would not be sufficent to assert particular argument, and also eventually it attenuate it. That being said, if there data like 10000 case in job realate accident in panoply, then in bultler company case will be 13000, which give conspicuous picture to implement it, and also strenght the argument. Hence, percent report should in acutul number to compound the argument.
Likewise, fatigue and sleep cause help to wane the job related accident is wanting evidence to buttress the argument. We don't know how and why fatigue and lack of sleep is due to employee workign in company or some other thing. Meanwhile, what engender fatigue and lack of sleep should be expounded with more information to validate the argument. furthermore, what about company own safter policy, it should be alsp be evaluted.
consequenty, argument is undergrids by serval untenable and wanting assumption, informaation like percentage doesn't give accurate number of accident case, fatigue and sleep cause desideratum more exegesis, and what about company own safety evaluation?. And hence , Above mention disabsue should be followed to buttres the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 304 350
No. of Characters: 1553 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.109 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.797 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.43 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...owever, argument is undergrids by serval untenable and wanting assumption, inform...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ssumption, informaation like percentage doesnt give accurate number of accident case, ...
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... about company own safety evaluation?. Moreover, percentage doesnt refelect acc...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...y evaluation?. Moreover, percentage doesnt refelect accurate number that is 30 per...
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Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nly vague but also ambiguous testimony. As it we are not able to to know apt numbe...
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Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...iguous testimony. As it we are not able to to know apt number of job accident case. I...
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Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'attenuates'?
Suggestion: attenuates
...icular argument, and also eventually it attenuate it. That being said, if there data like...
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Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...e help to wane the job related accident is wanting evidence to buttress the argument. We d...
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Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...g evidence to buttress the argument. We dont know how and why fatigue and lack of sl...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...e information to validate the argument. furthermore, what about company own safter policy, ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequenty
...icy, it should be alsp be evaluted. consequenty, argument is undergrids by serval unt...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ld be alsp be evaluted. consequenty, argument is undergrids by serval untena...
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...uenty, argument is undergrids by serval untenable and wanting assumption, inform...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ssumption, informaation like percentage doesnt give accurate number of accident case, ...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ompany own safety evaluation?. And hence , Above mention disabsue should be follow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, likewise, moreover, so, then, while, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 300.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75359772227 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503333333333 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4234328348 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.461538462 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125513311943 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527337362761 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431686800862 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780547369746 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484366532351 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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