The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery
of heating oil.
"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used
oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with belownormal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several
more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population
growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased
demand for heating oil during the next five years."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and
explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
This memo emphasizes on the issue that the penchant of people for consuming the oil as a major source of heating process will reached to highest point in 5 years. To endorse this allegation, three postulations have been proposed. 1) Opting for oil as the first selection for warming their homes, 2) the inclement temperature for 90 days will provoke people to amplify their consumption and 3) the population explosion in that realm leads to augment the use of oil. After weighing each of these facts, it can be concluded that none of them seem plausible.
A threshold problem with the statement involves the oil as the primary and fist option for people to heat their homes. In contrast, today's intricate technologies in heating provinces have revolutionizes the people's life style in opting their fuel resources. In fact, the majority of persons are more partial to supplant solar energy, nuclear or even hydrogen energy in lieu of oil. To delineate, currently, people become aware of oil sources restrictions and they prioritize the new approach instead of conventional method for keeping their houses warm and congenial. Thus, the memo omits the significance of knowledge of people in choosing their current energy and what is mentioned in the text cannot be tenable.
Even assuming that according to 90 days of severe weather condition, the circumstance of the future's weather will be anticipated intensive as well cannot be defensible. Since, the data of 90 days are not sufficient to make such this vigorous conclusion about the weather condition of following years. Additionally, the more the number of data, the more authenticity and accuracy of ramifications will be obtained. Thus, To reach more appropriate results, the scientists and experts should expand their cases in sundry situations and keep other elements having interfered with and altered the final repercussions constant to assure whether 90 days can provide the correct result or not. To shed more light. Rarely can the experiments based on nugatory information in constraint time bring about valid and strong results.
Nor does the mere the fact that increasing the population of one region leads to elevate the oil consumption. Conversely, as it is transparent, the more the population of one area heightens, the more global warming will be observed. That means, the weather temperature in that region will increase, consequently, the predilection of denizens to exploit the oil for heating their homes will be lowered to its lowest point. To clarify, the argument underestimates the factor of population and its interaction with temperature, therefore, it does not defensible to regard the higher demands for oil in 5 years based on the persons who are residing in that province.
In sum, the argument is coherently flawed and hence untenable as it stands. To bolster the thesis, the author must investigate the time far more than 90 days to predict the weather condition for 5 years, as well as, the text should take into account the predominant paradigm shift in the tendency of residents to utilize new sources of energy instead of conventional strategy. To elucidate on, the role of population increment and its impact on warming the environment cannot be ignored.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reach'
Suggestion: reach
... a major source of heating process will reached to highest point in 5 years. To endorse...
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Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the highest'.
Suggestion: to the highest
... source of heating process will reached to highest point in 5 years. To endorse this alleg...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ating provinces have revolutionizes the peoples life style in opting their fuel resourc...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...intensive as well cannot be defensible. Since, the data of 90 days are not sufficient...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in contrast, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2740.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 530.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16981132075 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90389311608 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 204.123752495 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52641509434 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 846.0 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8132611762 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.545454545 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15867967429 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445596470577 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523800020211 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937870226879 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678303173201 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 170.0 98.500998004 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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