The following appeared in a memo from the Dean of Residential Life at Radsliffe College.
“To continue to meet the needs of our students who require housing, we must update our housing system to not only meet safety standards but also to provide amenities that appeal to students. These are often the deciding factor when making the choice of whether to stay on campus or off-campus. By understanding the amenities students want and incorporating them into our updated housing, we can discourage students from moving off-campus, resulting in a closer-knit community on campus and more revenue for student programming.
Discuss the additional evidence or information needed to establish if the argument reasonable.
College campus and the infrastructure provided by the university has to be good enough for a student to continue his/her studies. So the Dean at Radsliffe College is concerned about the fact that students are moving outside the college. Because it affects their revenue of the college and also in terms of growth, he/she also wants to improve the infrastructure by adding basic amenities in the housing system by keeping updated to the current trends. These things are essential for a college and its a responsibility of the College to provide improved environment for the students to nurture and grow. Since not every college is present in urban, few college which lies around 100 miles away from the city should not lack in providing the fundamentals for the students.
Yet there are several factors which plays in deciding whether a students will revert or persist to stay inside the campus, students who are actually in the college might not be only keen on housing, they are also in need of several opportunities for their livelihood and curriculum. Students who are pursuing Master’s try to get an internship or a job nearby place, so they might start relocating for the job, also people who do project works, course works and experiments might stay out of college to get good practical exposure whatever they are not able to get in the college environment. These are some factors which I would like to highlight, because these things serves a major purpose in any students lives. In addition, not every student can afford a costly environment because we should also think about the students under poverty. So including all the basic amenities might not help in bringing the students to college housing.
Providing the students with practical exposures, by availing teaching or research oriented assistantships and bringing down the housing fees for merit students who possess good marks and also by cutting down some fees as scholarship for the under poverty students will be helpful for the students and also might solve the issue. Broadening the opportunities for a student will cause an affinity towards the college. Because a student’s motto is to learn and enhance his/her knowledge and career, if he/she gets the same level of infrastructure in the college, there is not second thoughts about the decision.
To conclude, basic amenities like Wi-Fi, living basics, gym and swimming pool are just one part of the livelihood. For a student there are variety of things required like job, research, merit based scholarships, scholarships for under poverty students. These are few basic issues which is being faced by the students which has to be addressed by the college in addition to the suggestions whatever Dean of Radsliffe College has proposed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 498, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... things are essential for a college and its a responsibility of the College to prov...
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Line 1, column 649, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun college seems to be countable; consider using: 'few colleges'.
Suggestion: few colleges
... not every college is present in urban, few college which lies around 100 miles away from t...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...factors which plays in deciding whether a students will revert or persist to stay inside t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'as to', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25702811245 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.170682730924 0.15541462614 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0562248995984 0.0836205057962 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0381526104418 0.0520304965353 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0180722891566 0.0272364105082 66% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142570281124 0.125424944231 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0542168674699 0.0416121511921 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77442356736 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0321285140562 0.026700313972 120% => OK
Particles: 0.00401606425703 0.001811407834 222% => OK
Determiners: 0.112449799197 0.113004496875 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0240963855422 0.0255425247493 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0200803212851 0.0127820249294 157% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2774.0 2731.13054187 102% => OK
No of words: 456.0 446.07635468 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08333333333 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381578947368 0.378187486979 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315789473684 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19298245614 0.208842608468 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105263157895 0.135150697306 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77442356736 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 207.018472906 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480263157895 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 54.1132147119 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 28.5 23.2022227129 123% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.176204911 57.7814097925 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.375 141.986410481 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.2022227129 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4375 0.724660767414 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 60.0789473684 51.9672348444 116% => OK
Elegance: 2.0 1.8405768891 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437349898779 0.441005458295 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119917908269 0.135418324435 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0562691444373 0.0829849096947 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.593710237273 0.58762219726 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120097130081 0.147661913831 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.208394364279 0.193483328276 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838874067517 0.0970749176394 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.439999361507 0.42659136922 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0677886745087 0.0774707102158 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330090648037 0.312017818177 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705979253225 0.0698173142475 101% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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