The following appeared in the memo from director of international students affair at Darrington college.
"To better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington college, we should build a new cafeteria for the students at subsidized rates.The current cafeteria is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, a oint that will surely deter future international students from applying to Darrington college. Building a new cafeteria will prevent this from happening and will certainly lead to dramatic increase in popularity of college. Moreover a new cafeteria will help Darrington college to justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year.Building a new cafeteria will therefore be a great help towars enhancing the rank of Darrington college. "
The argument states that building of a new cafeteria will help cater international students better and thus will increase the raning of Darrington College. The argument at first glance seems plausible, however on scrupulous analysis, it is found to be rife with holes and assumptions. assumptions. A valid stand can be taken on this argument only after the evidence required to evaluate the argument is thoroughly analyzed.
The argument states that to better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington college, a new cafeteria should be constructed to cater the students at subsidized rates. There is no evidence given that the college cafeteria is a priority for international students while selecting Darrington college. It assumes that no other point is a priority for international students.
Furthermore, the arguments states that the expensive dishes in the cafeteria will deter international students. There is no evidence given if the students indeed have any complaints regarding the expensive dishes. Moreover, the is no data given whether the students prefer the college cafeteria or if they prefer an off-campus cafeteria.
The author further assumes that the construction of a new cafeteria will lead to a dramatic increase in popularity. There is no reasoning provided by the author which substantiates this claim. Furthermore, the author says that building a cafeteria will also incite students to enroll in Darrington college without giving any evidence to prove that claim.
Moreover, the author claims that the new cafe justifies a higher budget for educational improvement. The author assumes that all other aspects of Darrington college are top notch and the cafeteria is the only thing requiring improvement. Without evidence to corroborate this claim, the increased budget may not be justified.
The argument consists of weak ideas, mixed issues and equivocal claims due to the flaws mentioned above in the line of reasoning. There is a possibility that the opening a new cafeteria can help enhance Darrington college's ranking, but the reasoning given is rife with flaws and inaccuracies. Therefore, it is extremely important to find the evidence that supports the claims of the author. And only after finding the evidences, the following topic can be strengthened.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1913 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.329 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.925 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.898 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Assumptions
... to be rife with holes and assumptions. assumptions. A valid stand can be taken on this arg...
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Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: top-notch
...other aspects of Darrington college are top notch and the cafeteria is the only thing req...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47632311978 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02595953813 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451253481894 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8755880763 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.473684211 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357599903877 0.218282227539 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112596185674 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122873437004 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196454670339 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138871061043 0.0628817314937 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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