The author of the argument states that Buckingham's collage enrollment is growing and will double over next fifty years, thus making existing dorm space inadequate.To support this view the author states that average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years so it is difficult for students to afford off-campus.The author also points out that attractive new dorm would make student more likely to enroll at their collage.However, the line of reasoning presented by the author is full of incomplete evidences and unsubstantiated assumptions which renders the argument weak and unconvincing.
First of all, the author states that new dorm room will attract student to sign up their programs at Buckingham's collage.The author fails to consider the possibility that students are more serious about their job opportunity and career and how well is the staff, faculty, ranking, collage reputation which create a huge impact on their future.Unless we are not sure about what type of students are enroll and what they really want from collage. We cannot says that making new dorm room is useful.
Moreover, the author states that cost of apartment outside the campus increases and students have difficulty to afford them.The author fails to consider the possibility that their are few apartment may be available and many of the students do not want to live in campus because outside the campus they do may things like jobs and may be inside the campus there are many students who bully them. Unless we are not sure about every apartment is costly or collage is free from bully activities, we cannot says that students are want to live in collage campus dorm.
Furthermore, the author states that collage trends shows that enrollment will increase in the recent years.The author fails to consider the possibility that data may be altered or this information which collage collected may be wrong which cause huge problem for financing the collage for otter things. Unless we are not sure about whether data is true or not, we cannot says that making new dorm room for collage will help in increase more number of students
To conclude, the argument in current state lack substantial grounds to make a persuasive case. Therefore, the author need to provide more credible evidences to strengthen his or her claim.
Essay evaluation report
students are want to live in collage campus dorm.
students want to live in collage campus dorm.
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. we may say: maybe most students are locals already having their own homes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 15 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1906 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.875 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.446 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.749 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.707 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.197 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...s making existing dorm space inadequate.To support this view the author states tha...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...icult for students to afford off-campus.The author also points out that attractive ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... more likely to enroll at their collage.However, the line of reasoning presented by the...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...p their programs at Buckinghams collage.The author fails to consider the possibilit...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Unless
...ch create a huge impact on their future.Unless we are not sure about what type of stud...
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Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enrolled'.
Suggestion: enrolled
...ot sure about what type of students are enroll and what they really want from collage....
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...students have difficulty to afford them.The author fails to consider the possibilit...
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Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... fails to consider the possibility that their are few apartment may be available and ...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...lment will increase in the recent years.The author fails to consider the possibilit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08072916667 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65002205957 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473958333333 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 22.8473053892 210% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 175.756045415 57.8364921388 304% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 243.875 119.503703932 204% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.0 23.324526521 206% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.375 5.70786347227 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103073329175 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489150752721 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351633087575 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0635620496401 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351684927711 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.5 14.3799401198 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.76 48.3550499002 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.197005988 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 11.1389221557 190% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.9071856287 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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