The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The director of student housing at Buckingham’s College claims that over the next 50 years, enrollment of students in Buckingham’s College is going to be double and therefore wants the college to build more domitories for the students. In support of this claim he provides certain vague and unconvincing evidences such as the current trend, rise in average rate for an apartment in the town making it difficult for students to afford off-campus housing. The author’s lack of in-depth analysis and missing evidences and arguments have led to holes in the reasoning of the argument.
Firstly, the author has made an incorrect assumption on the basis of current trends that the student enrollment in their college is going to be doubled over the period of 50 years. Prediction of over 50 years requires a lot of detailed analysis of many facts witch are not provided as supporting evidence by the author. There may occur many ups and downs within the period of 50 years on ecclectic factors. Therefore, only on the basis of current trends and without proper statistical facts and evidences the author cannot assume directly double the increase in enrollment of students in Buckingham’s College.
Secondly, the author claims that it would be difficult to afford off-campus housing. For which he provides the evidence of an increase in average rent for an apartment in the town. However, the author has not mentioned about the reasons for the increase in rent of apartments. Moreover, the author assumes that many people won’t be able to afford such costly houses off-campus. The increase in rent may be for a certain period of time and within a certain vicinity of the college. Without proper evidence the author cannot justify an increase in rent.
Thirdly, new domitories won’t be the sole reason because of which the students would be attracted to enroll in Buckingham’s College. More than attractiveness, Studies is an important aspect for enrollment. The author has provided no evidence for the increase in enrollment and without proper evidence increase in new domitories cannot be properly justified.
In conclusion, the author, in order to support his claims, should have included the above evidences.with the lack of profound analysis, and supporting evidences as well as logic and comprehensive reasoning, the argument stands weak. A detailed study of the increase in enrollment need to be provided in order to fill the holes of the argument and support the author’s hypothesis.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 2047 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.017 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.741 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.373 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e increase in rent may be for a certain period of time and within a certain vicinity of the co...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19458128079 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89548441346 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426108374384 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0882052819 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.166666667 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168378556173 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057302167962 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101924395997 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110645333211 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923783050877 0.0628817314937 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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